But I still love you

When you believe that the reason for the breakup is you, how do you carry on without your love�. This, unfortunately is true.

Very rarely does one come across

Someone as exceptional as you

I consider myself lucky that I did

I am grateful for the love you showered on me

For showing faith in me, like no one else

Slowly but steadily I moved closer to you

Shared my heart, enriched my soul

Trusted you with myself

I painted a very pretty picture

Of my future with you

Of our life together.

 

With your arms around me,

I got over the fears and the insecurities

That had been a part of me for so long

I was happy, I was eager

I was ready to start anew with you

I believed that I could overcome any obstacle

To make my dream come true

All along I was unaware that the biggest hurdle was me

I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self

I have lost you to my recklessness

I have stained your life

Sadly, I realized it too late

I have accepted my mistake

But I don’t ask to be forgiven

It’s too big a crime for that

So I have moved away

I hope you can move on

You haven't lost anything

For you are without something,

That wasn't worth having.

But I have lost happiness

The happiness that was made of you.

So, even though I cannot have you here by my side,

I still hold you close to my heart

The first thought on my mind is always Y-O-U

And I carry your memories everywhere I go

You are not with me today

But I will never be without you

 

 

Reviews

[Yvonne Heidt]

OMG - I totally have chills. (sorry - the valley girl slipped out!) This is beautifully written with honesty and (I believe) integrity. I FELT this.

I can relate to it all. The pain and loneliness are here without whining. Excellent job.

I LOVED this line:
"I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self"

[turtlegirlluver]

Wow, I'm at a loss for words. This is such a powerful piece and you show your emotions very well. The last line got me, as that is so true in my life. Amazing job!

"You are not with me today
But I will never be without you"

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is not just a poem, this is "part of you"
Your entire journey has been described here...from the time when you were together with him till now when you are living with the past and often, thinking about him.
You have written your emotions so perfectly here, really your emotions are flowing from it like anything!

"You are not with me today
But I will never be without you ...

This line is so personal and it gave such a huge impact on the reader's mind.
I really do believe that the person about whom you have written this poem should read it...really....

This is really an outstanding piece and indeed the best of yours!



"A door knocked twice, Insider - Whoz this?
Reply came- "True love"
Insider said - Its not possible because..true love doesn't knock twice..."

:)

[scorpion-red]

beautiful piece of work i felt the words

[Fallen_Immortal]

I really love this piece. The title on its own captivates me, even though it is so simple and I'm sure I've heard it a dozen times. Something about it is so desperate and lost. It's gorgeous.

The only part that I didn't like was "The first thought on my mind is always Y-O-U"

The Y-O-U just seemed to stick out like a sore thumb. But other than that, amazing work.

[.:Naiira Harlow:.]

I feel such sadness and pain in this poem. A great read and a very heartfelt poem.

[Christine]

Wow, this was amazing! Great write!!! Congrats on the award!!!
~Christine :-)

[Riverdance]

"You are not with me today

But I will never be without you "

I know the feeling all too well. Very beautifully written! I felt your pain through your words.
I love your style and the flow. It read well mentally and aloud.

Overall, I just loved it all! But I feel like you deserve a hug too. *hugs*

Thanks for entering the Move Me contest!

~Rd

[Nely Amorim]

This is a strong and emotive piece and I feel the pain behind the words. I thank you very much for entering this wonderful poem in my contest.

[The Grammar Nazi]

Very, very well written. And it actually shows a Hell of a lot of emotion. Very good write.

[Catastrophe]

Wow...there is so much sadness...but so much beauty as well..
i loved reading this piece, truly amazing...that's all i have to say...
because i cant find the words that would even begin to describe what i think of this...great write