Insomnia (Acrostic)

Re-written.

 

 

I lie awake yet again

 

Not knowing how long this will last

 

Suffering quietly, in solitude

 

Outside, the silence of the night, smiles helplessly

 

My mind is so weary of watchfulness, but

 

Never a moment's rest inside

 

Incurable insomnia keeps another victim awake until

 

Another colorless morning

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rain]

Ambein!! God, I hate those night. Too tired to get up, and so you just lay there, eyes open. You described the agony. Rain

[Ladysue]

Very nicely done, Caffeine.

[Sean M. Addams]

very nicely done... flows together nicely.

[Ivory]

I love the imagery. I would have never thought to describe insomia is such a way.
Very creativem great write : )

[Fran Marie]

A very well crafted Acrostic~ I can relate to this poem of insomia quite well~very nicely done~Fran Marie

[Shane Patrick]

Ok Caffine the same title on two poems that is weird.. my insomnia is not acrostic, but even if it was would not be as good as this... wonderful!

[None]

I used to have caffeine after 3pm and would have it myself but cut it out. What a contemplative write, since most of us have been there can understand and sympathize.
You did a nice job with your wording and captured elegance in the affliction.

[CK Kimball]

I like this one, I especially like the line "Mind so weary of watchfulness, yet" I like the way it breaks. You can feel the emphasis.
I can relate, wholly to this poem.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

This is a great acrostic. WOW. It blows me right away. :) It's almost comical, paired with your display name, there. lol. I love this poem, as I can relate. Thanks for entering the contest, and best of luck to you in it!
KH

[Adrianne]

Right there with ya...I'm sure there's no coincidence with the caffeine addiction, either :-) Most of this poem works well, I think the pace slows on the line "incurable insomnia keeps." With Insomnia as the title, and the piece so short, it's almost like the reader's being force-fed the issue, and the line trips up a bit, anyway. There may be a smoother way to ease into that terrific last line (I think it works really well to point out the continuation of the situation).