Winter

Cold outside. Cold within.

 

 

 

 

Snow at my front door,

Preserves the trail of your steps.

 

My heart is cold too.

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Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! beautiful haiku!
Great imagery and a very powerful piece of writing it is...
I loved the closing line a lot - "My heart is cold too."
Surely, it is very painful and intriguing. Winter is a season which I both loves and hates the most... lolz!
Because every December reminds me of my broken relationship which is very hard to deal with..but again it brings some bitter sweet memories which I still cherish a lot...And thus it always make me cold... cold from inside..as you said!
Brilliant piece of writing :)

"In the depths of winter I finally learned there was in me an invincible summer"

[Alaska Frost]

Beautiful haiku! I had already read this haiku before, but it never loses its meaning. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest! :)
-Alaska

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your Winning Haiku. Well done!

Author: Nancy Lee Shrader
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[Frances O'Neill]

Nice thought, preserving someone's footsteps although they are far from home!

[Tammy]

Love the imagery... Wonderful haiku!!!

[Brianna Brie]

Ouch...this is like frost bite. What a great closing line. You are a master with short poetry as you pack a punch. Great stuff. Thanks for entering it into the Missing Him, Missing Her contest.

[Emily B]

Lovely as the patterns of frost on an early morning window.

[BrightEyes]

wow this packs a lot of emotion for such a short piece - actually tugs at my heartstrings . It speaks of such pain and loss; all in those few lines - excellent write.

[Kevin Andros]

Though I do not have the slightest Idea of what is a Haiku, I am smart enough to notice the brilliance of this peice. Cold outside, cold within. Fake warmth won't do us any good as we are cold from the inside as well.

Very... er... cold write. But really thought stirring.

Keep it up. ~KA~

[Carole]

A Haiku masterpiece! I love the analogy of the snow to a cold heart. An excellent choice of pictures, C!

[T]

Well done!! love the challenge of a haiku and this is one of my favorites!!