If you think...

It took me less than 15 minutes to write this....I felt like the words were flowing from my fingers straight onto the keyboard. I didn't exactly have to think much. I suspect that my brain did not compose it. My heart did.

 

 

 

If you think...
It’s easy for me to carry on,
Find another man and live another life,
Build another home and be a good wife,
You’re mistaken...

If you think...
I have erased your memories from my mind,
Emptied my wardrobe of your clothes,
Thrown away your letters, those love notes,
You’re mistaken…

 
If you think...
I can spend an entire hour minus a thought of you,
I go to bed each night without shedding a tear,
And I don’t get flashes of you everywhere,
You’re mistaken…

If you think I don’t miss you, you’re mistaken
…mistaken, because I can’t look beyond you.

For you mean myself to me.
Yes, you still do…

 

 

Reviews

[Alba T.]

I understand this so completely, I felt like this ...
a couple of times...
thinking it I could never feel this again....
but I did and it was the most horrible feeling ever...
I was told to go on, forget about him, live your life...
But how could I, when he was my life...
Like it is written above... "For you mean myself to me"...
that's just how I felt.
Beautiful Poem.
Alba :-)

[RareRed]

Wow...this is just awesome. I felt like the words were leaping off the page and just speaking to me.

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

For you mean myself to me.
Yes, you still do�

now that is totally awsome well written and imagry springs out in complete wonder. i absolutly love that last line... well done. sometimes in our hearts is the most truth we'll ever know. i am sorry for your loss

[Blackbirdsong]

I think that poems that come out of us this easily are the reasons why so many of us write. Those moments when the words and feelings burst out of us are wonderful and also where some of our best works come from. This was really well done and I couldn't tell in any way at all that this has been written in such a short time. Actually it felt like the opposite...so kudos to you for that.

I love the repetitions of "you are mistaken" throughout, but the darkened fonts don't add anything to the power of your words in any way. Your words speak boldly without need for anything else to highlight then in my opinion.

My only suggestion for this would be to think about the last stanza of this poem a bit. It doesn't read as strongly as the rest of the poem and I think that's because you abandon the form you'd written in the previous stanzas. But perhaps that's just me and the fact that I really loved what you did you here.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

"I go to bed each night without shedding a tear,
And I don't get flashes of you everywhere, "

the rhyme scheme in something like the verses above is just fantastic. and you managed this throughout the entire piece. i adore this.

really really love it.

[Kevin Andros]

Sorry for taking so long to get here! My bandwidth had exceeded beyond the limits and I had to close down my net for the last couple of weeks. Now that a new month is here, I can now finally catch up with the read requests.

The feel of the peice is so true and understanding, it explains the condition of the heart after a wound, a deep one. I liked the way you kept repeating the words "If you think.........." all along the poem and "You are mistaken............."

Nice work. ~KA~

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Dang, well done, very much how I feel over my ex wife right now.

[Matt]

I love it. This poem rocks! I mean it makes you feel sad but hopeful at the same time.

[Candle in the wind]

For you mean myself to me.
That sums it up so aptly.How does one forget such a person??
Beautiful spontaneous overflow

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I'm glad you noted that you wrote this poem in 15 minutes or so because I often think that poetry should be that in-the-moment writing. I once read, from a publishing house, that a person's first book of poetry should take like 5 to 10 years to write and get right (whatever right is). I wholeheartedly disagree. I can feel your pain and anguish, as well as love in this poem. 15 minutes, or 15 years, it doesn't matter what length of time it takes, but the effort behind the feat is what really matters. I would say, that in 15 minutes you summed the past 5 years of my life with astounding eloquence and power. This is a great poem that communicates great passion and emotion. I love it. Thank you.

[Marie]

This was really great.