Bad Luck brought you here

True

I would have warned you

Had I known that destiny

Would bring you to me.

 

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

first of all i love the picture you use with this.

the 3 lines work so very well with each other

the 5 / 7 / 5 makes this flow up and then drops into a little surprise ending.

it makes me imagine an epic tale... all the details as nothing compared to the ultimate sentiment of love.

this is a piece that could be interpreted many different ways but each i think would contain a level of tragedy.

[Jack of Aces]

lol ..ok
don't know what to say about this
its kinda cool in a twisted sort of way
I think you would do well to add to it...because its such a strong beginning

[Ladysue]

You have great ability and I love reading your work. Great job!

[V. K. Harris]

Very nice.

[Nicole Renee]

Wow, this was a very good!

[Brette Medb]

Never sell yourself short or you could be denying yourself something truly wonderful... great write!



B.

[Alex]

:(
love has been vacant with a lot of us here at writer cafe I wonder why ...

[Yvonne Heidt]

This is really good! Great job.

[Ivory]

Very powerful senryu.
Gives a sense of not being good enough ,warning the other of your imperfections.
Good write : )

[Crimson Shadow]

Feeling inadequate is a hard pill to swallow, especially when we love the person - we don't feel we are good for...maybe not even good enough for. Either way, we have to admit we are not meant to be the ONE forever in their lives....and when we can't imagine our life without them - it is nothing short of devastating.

Always- emotive and heart wrenching....I've grown accustom to your ability to bleed onto the page.

[Shane Patrick]

Would take this as a Senryu, only because it fits... I like the pointed nature of this piece.. when a senryu can say so many things, its always good.. nice job..