Bad Luck brought you here

True

I would have warned you

Had I known that destiny

Would bring you to me.

 

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

first of all i love the picture you use with this.

the 3 lines work so very well with each other

the 5 / 7 / 5 makes this flow up and then drops into a little surprise ending.

it makes me imagine an epic tale... all the details as nothing compared to the ultimate sentiment of love.

this is a piece that could be interpreted many different ways but each i think would contain a level of tragedy.

[Kevin Andros]

Damn! How do you manage to do this!? How do you manage to say so many things in such a few words!? being awsome! ~kA~

[justjenn_2u]

Short and concise. Fate leaves such unpredicitablity.

You summed this up with incredible selection of words.

[Nicholas Hallows]

In my opinion this is about as good as a senryu can get.
A very powerful piece in its sadness and makes the reader create a story of their own.
Excellent!

[Sparrow]

This was one of the first submissions I read for the contest and it really foreshadowed all the excellent work I was in store to read. You really set the bar for everyone. I really loved this piece in all it's depth. It's one of my favorites easily.

Good luck in the contest, I'll be announcing winners sooooooon, I promise!

Sparrow

[Caitbabie008]

I liked it a lot. I just dont get the pic with it but im not judging or saying it doesnt belong.

[maiarusm]

Interesting thoughts and emotions for such a short piece. Good work.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Your words are really pure magic!!

Deeper than the depth of any ocean and could penetrating even a rock.
And that's the best thing about your writes :)
This is a kind of dark piece and according to me you should not underestimate yourself like this :)
Because you know the reality of life is that everyone will remain good to you until you expect nothing from them, and you will also remain good to them until you fulfill their expectations ! :)
Great write ! 8-)

[Rain]

Wow..
I know the feeling of this piece. I always thought I wasn't good enough, or I would mess up a good thing. It wasn't true, but you feel it is. I loved this, because I understand it, and you said it so vividly. Rain..

[Serendipity]

Don't ever say that your are not good enough; that statement is not true. The fact is that this person is the one who is not good enough for YOU. Sometimes we don't realize our own value and we underestimate our worth. Life gives us these tests, and they confuse you; trust me they confuse you. They make you wonder and question everything that you've been doing, that you are doing, and what you're about to do. Take time to look into your heart, because you deserve better. And this person who is making you feel like you are not good enough, is in fact worthless in your life.