Living without him

 

Some stories remain incomplete

Not all poems rhyme

 

Broken wings, shattered dreams

Memories frozen in time

 

I can still hear his words- spoken, unspoken

My brave promises to him-a few still unbroken

 

Nothing can again break my heart

For I, have already ripped it apart

 

17th June 2007

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is beautifully sad and so perfectly heartbreaking!
"I can still hear his words- spoken, unspoken
My brave promises to him-a few still unbroken"- These lines out stand for me, I loved them the most..
Also, then ending...ah! It's beautiful..
I loved this piece :)


"To fall in love is awfully simple, but to fall out of love is simply awful."

[Fran Marie]

A sad short write very deeply expressed and well penned~THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[V. K. Harris]

Greatly written.

[Dorothy]

Beautiful. Short but full of emotion! I love it. Great way to express your point and good job on the rhyme. It is honestly very good.

[Jenny Davis]

Aww, I really liked the flow of this. It is really hard to pick up those pieces when they are scattered everywhere. The heart is the one things that is hard to heal, but with time, it will :)
Very well written!

[James Mayfield]

Nice piece this one. I like the feeling of it. Sad yet enjoyable. nice read.

[Victoria Lee~]

This is a beautiful, albiet, sad write. Lost love, regrets and broken hearts. Excellent work.

[Amor-de-angel]

Sad but lovely.

Broken wings, shattered dreams
Memories frozen in time

Expressed nicely.

[Alex]

This is a sad piece but beautiful it seems a lot of us on writers cafe are dealing with lost love of late ...
loved this line -

Nothing can again break my heart
For I, have already torn it apart.

[Ivory]

So much sadness in this piece.
I loved the ending stanza, how we blame ourselves for love gone wrong.
Very honest and sincere your words are.
Very good write : )

[John Stussy]

Nothing can again break my heart
For I, have already torn it apart.

Love that stanza. I love it when people say that they are shattered by people again and again, when your heart can only be broken once really. Interesting thought, but pretty true. Makes sense, just as people say that they are "in love" whenever they are drawn to another person, so too whenever they get hurt by that person they are "heart broken." Only a chance for one in each case. Great job, really thought inspiring.