CoNFEssIoN

 

 

Don’t listen to me

Hear me if you will

Believe me if you can

I hadn’t intended to kill

 

But that’s the way it is now

Like I hadn’t wished it to be

When the dizzy spell ended

Life wasn’t with me.

 

I confess to killing my life

Yes, that’s bizarrely true

The end is over

And with it, I’ve lost you.

 

 

 

July 2, 2007

 

Reviews

[C. Harter Amos]

What a horribly sad confession. It sounds as if you had no choice, and there is always choice. We're born creatures of free will and for some it's free will used to whittle down our lives to a barest minimum; a road of self-deprivation and suffering. Life is for adding onto as well as subtracting from. One door shut opens another, as they say. Besides, a door shut on a relationship isn't always locked with the key thrown away. I've recently had to let go of my relationship with a daughter that I love dearly, a mother that I'll never again share closeness with in this world, a faithful watchdog who saved my life at least on two occasions, a husband who was 97% wonderful but 3% lethal...Life keeps marching forward regardless. This is another wonderfully written piece. You have a pure talent for cutting to the heart of a matter and putting it on paper with the blood still fresh from your wounds. Kudos and applause as usual for a beautiful write.

[Adrian K. Smith]

This is an interesting confession, that I can see being made at the close of a relationship - where the one partner realizes that the other is not the person that they had fallen for originally. Instead of this being the typical infatuation facade that eventually fades though, it is the stark admission that the one had destroyed themselves - robbing their love of the person they had fallen for... it has a certain sense of cruelty on behalf of the Universe, to have let us do that to ourselves. I enjoyed what this piece left me to ponder. Thank you for sharing it with us...

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"I confess to killing my life
Yes, that's bizarrely true
The end is over
And with it, I've lost you..."

What a confession.. It is sad, beautifully written, painful and full of sorrow but most importantly it is so honest!
Strong but so much powerful it is...!

"I hadn't intended to kill" and "I confess to killing my life" are the most powerful lines of the entire write!
So so Deep and came right from your heart!
The picture also is going so well with it....As few confessions come right after cutting our heart but that's why your words are so true!
Beautifully written emotions!!


It reminds me of that quote :D -

"Deep in my heart I'm concealing things that I'm longing to say. Scared to confess what I'm feeling - frightened you'll slip away."

[MorganLyn]

oh my, how hard it is to lose someone so close to you that they practically made you who you are..
wonderfully written. :)

[Rain]

July 2nd. These piece just are so strong, but they all have a self blaming tone. Rain..

[SweetPeachesAlways]

But that's the way it is now
Like I hadn't wished it to be

I can so relate to this...well, excellent job. Very quaint and simple, yet truly effective! Honest write.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A difficult time when one destroys their own life and loses the one they love. Thanks for sharing. Debileah

[Amor-de-angel]

Short but very effective write

I confess to killing my life.......wow strong line.
Excellent work
Amor

[Dorothy]

Very sad and yet beautiful. I love the use of the short lines.... very nice. I absolutely love it. It is simple and yet so wonderful. I like this one a lot!

[Helen Woodward]

I'd be lying if I said that I totally grasp this because I don't. Can I ask for explanation of text? I'd really be interested...thanks.
Cheers,
Helen...

[James Mayfield]

A very strong piece. It was moving in a dark sort of way and I enjoyed the work. Thank you for sharing.