few words

few words

A Poem by amrit

Few thoughts better left back there 
few words better left unsaid, sorrows.
Nah, i cant moist them eyes 
her words my life much of a sunset
her smiles disguise of my plight.
this plateau owes to my lies
Like a wicked rhyme my heart goes crook
when credit roles of her smiles.
Like they know the reason of her dry eyes.
Nah, they don`t know me or the yoke i`m under
when echoes of my envies act as a thunder.

© 2014 amrit


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liked it...good choiceof words and perfect lyricism...great work

Posted 10 Years Ago


good job,

artistic way of expression

Posted 10 Years Ago


I sense a lot of ego in your write which is kinda good, I believe, it is like you rule a kingdom but can't quite call you the king. You are , no wonder , good with words.

Posted 10 Years Ago


amrit

10 Years Ago

i really liked the way u showed up with your thoughts .. u got the ego part :) thanx for reviewing i.. read more
thanx for taking your time out to review it..

Posted 10 Years Ago


A very well thought out poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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