Sister

Upon her request, I wrote this poem for my cousin-sister who is a year younger than me.

Remember when-

We’d sit in diapers

And we’d get caught

Being overly hyper

Remember when-

We’d talk to each other

No one’d understand us

Not even our mothers

Remember when-

We were both so small

I would wobble and walk

And you’d be learning to crawl

Remember when-

The floor was dirty

So we lathered it with shampoo

And made it all purty

Remember when-

We played with each other

In our make-believe play

I’d always be your mother

Remember when-

We found the hidden treasure

We cut bangs in our hair

To our parents’ extreme displeasure

Remember when-

I thought you had lice

Using the disinfectant

I rinsed your hair thrice

Remember when-

We’d be outside the whole day

Pretending to be flower girls

And gathering bouquets

Remember when-

We’d listen to nursery rhymes

We’d even jump on the bed

And dance to ‘em sometimes

Remember when-

I got mad at you

The pillow found your head

And so did the shoe

Ah those good times,

Do you remember them too?

Oh how fast time flies,

Oh how much do I miss you!

You were that pesky cousin sister,

That has shared my smiles and tears.

We’d confide in each other,

Our secrets and worst fears.

I know you are there,

So very far away.

I hope you remember me,

In your prayers everyday.

Although we fight

Whenever we are together,

Deep down I love you,

Forever and ever.

I sometimes wonder,

What’s going to be our next feat.

Oh I really can’t wait,

Until the next time we meet!

Author's Note

This is a silly (true) poem I wrote for my cousin about our memories together. We're a year (and many miles) apart and we've been glued to each other since the moment we were born (not literally of course). She's like my twin sister I never had. Our endless plots (only a few were actually successful) inspired me to write this piece. Title is based on request, so that's unchangeable; however I still don't know whether I should include further punctuation. Suggestions?
Thanks for reviewing/commenting/offering suggestions :)

Reviews

[JadeForever]

omg...I can totally relate to this since I myself have two older sisters. great poem.

-Jade

[Faiza Ansari]

This poem really touched my heart i was back on the days when i and my cousin were togather playing and dancing all around

[....]

ah this is so sweet, really beautiful.

[Archia]

I really enjoyed this, and I have to say I did laugh at some of the things.

[Summer D.]

Beautiful! I like the rhyming scheme of it and it gives it a jovial tone.
Some of the lines and grammar fell flat but this was stupendous overall.

I like the idea of the book of poems you're creating.
Hope to see a new one soon.

[Farah]

OMG i just luv this! it is SO sweet. i really wish i had a sister! its great that even though it rhymes, it also makes sense. AWSUM! =D =D

[Kelly M.]

Aw, how sweet and dear! :] This must certainly be a treasured piece in your cousin's heart. It was deeply heartfelt, and displayed the close bond between you and your cousin, and I enjoyed your touches of humor throughout. ;) Loved it :)

[Sashalee]

awwww :)

[Maddie:]]

this is a very cute piece:] its great that you have all these memories! i actually like how its titled "Sister", it strengthens the bond you have with your cousin, really showing us how much you two care for each other:] nice job!

[~Dragon X]

Awww your so lucky to have a cousin as close to you like that. :) you don't need the punctuation, it's perfect the way it is :D for some reason, I've read over this poem like three times, prepared myself to write a review, and then got distracted. With lots of things. I made an origami bat, eventually. XD Anywho, I think the poem just left me thinking. Those are the best kinds of written work. :3