I love this. So much passion in the first stanza then immediate peace in the next. Your words are always excellent but the evoking of response from the feel and rhythm were the most powerful to me.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
thank you so much. this is one of my very favourites of my recent works. I love how you picked up on.. read morethank you so much. this is one of my very favourites of my recent works. I love how you picked up on the progression to peace.
love this Lyn,; a wild cat hiding behind her claws until he sees the lovely little kitten who is just protecting herself against the world .... what a lovely rescue :)
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
So glad you picked this one. A rescue. I think I will pounce on that :)
This makes me very jealous, but I'm also happy for you, since it feels like this is autobiographical. This is the best I've read you, as far as speaking of your main love. This flows smoothly & authentically. And I'm not a fan of love poems. It's gotta feel complex like real love, as you do so well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
LOVE: "His love for me is an elevant,
minor irritations
cease to be relevant"
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Aww thanks. I agree with you on love poems if they feel artificial, overly composed, or forced, they.. read moreAww thanks. I agree with you on love poems if they feel artificial, overly composed, or forced, they feel insincere, like an overblown sappy romance movie. Real life is a whole lot messier and complicated than that. Thanks! Muah
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm love the back and forth of who she was and who she is ... elevating the relevant things is a deepening indeed ... a deedeed ;)
astounding how many break ups are based on how one holds a fork ... or hums when absorbed ... there is no getting past getting past those things when "in love" but knowing and feeling safe with another human being is blissful and well worth the loss of all our little "points" ... a wise and flowing true love poem for V-Day ... have a happy one Lyn!
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' You .. smoothe my edges .. glow my cheeks .. steady my breath .. and tease out the crinkles .. in my smile.. ' Special love, that..
Have found that looking for anything is more often or not a no-no! As to love, fate will have not have its wicked way but the most beautiful. One hopes. prays. Your words, the way you place them, makes reading such a pleasure, more than. You've a way of tipping your hat and our gaze slides this way that til mesmerised.. content and admiring, Lyn. Yet another 'brava' for the unique skill you share. Me, green with envy, nevah... much! x
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Such a glowing and kind review. Thank you ever so much
How true this is. All those minor irritations cease to be relevant. That surely is love for you. Your lines remind me as well of that old saying, if you go looking for love, you won't find it. It has a habit of finding you when you least expect it. I like your journey here Lyn.
nice to be "found" Lyn isn't it... there were two lines that really struck me... "she needed a man, not a lover" and "from first kiss, to lost count".... and for me, that is "elevant" and a journey worth taking...
Hmmhh... Wowee!!
I know twill take a lot of days, perhaps years for me to understand who's right for me to hug and take a vacation but I learned a little from your piece. ..
The way you said, she was fierce and her other qualities...I find all her expectations fair and valid....a heart shall resemble a coconut ;) searching the perfect man to see that heart's tender sight....
Thanks many for sharing this....enjoyed a lot in this drive!...
PS :- Can you please lemme know what elevant is....I desperately wanna grasp its meaning :)
So sweet. Thank you. I took a bit of liberty with my English and created a neologism - Elevant - (no.. read moreSo sweet. Thank you. I took a bit of liberty with my English and created a neologism - Elevant - (noun) as in something or someone that elevates one to higher levels . I am glad you enjoyed. Never settle for less than someone who makes you better than you knew you could be
5 Years Ago
Gotcha! I'd love to use this word be it in your neologism or in the main stream language..=)
.. read moreGotcha! I'd love to use this word be it in your neologism or in the main stream language..=)
..And, I'd try sticking on your advice...You're warmly welcomed :)
5 Years Ago
Go ahead, maybe we'll make it into a mainstream word. :)
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