Elevant journeys of the heart

sometimes the right word isn't a right word at all

She was fierce and freaky;

She had more points than soft spots --

Making her way through the list,

Drowning her pain in sweat;

Suffocating her hate under cover

She needed a man, not a lover …

 

Till she tripped over you …

I searched all around

Looked all over town

Couldn't find her

Where'd you hide her? 

She was lost

and I was found ...

You

smoothe my edges

glow my cheeks

steady my breath

and tease out the crinkles

in my smile

warm each and every part

of me

and match so very

perfectly

the imperfect beating

of my heart ...

His love for me is an elevant,

minor irritations

cease to be relevant,

a moment in his arms

is a vacation

for my weary heart.

from first kiss

to lost count ...

his love for me

elevates

me higher

than any

who came

before.

Author's Note

the journey from she to me and him to her is elevant

Reviews

[jane7z]

I love this. So much passion in the first stanza then immediate peace in the next. Your words are always excellent but the evoking of response from the feel and rhythm were the most powerful to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you so much. this is one of my very favourites of my recent works. I love how you picked up on the progression to peace.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is such a delightful pronouncement of love that takes it to a mico level of physicality as the emotion exists in every pore and every breath.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes it does. Thank you ever so much for your extended stay

[Stella Armour]

love this Lyn,; a wild cat hiding behind her claws until he sees the lovely little kitten who is just protecting herself against the world .... what a lovely rescue :)

[Lyn Anderson]

So glad you picked this one. A rescue. I think I will pounce on that :)

[barleygirl]

This makes me very jealous, but I'm also happy for you, since it feels like this is autobiographical. This is the best I've read you, as far as speaking of your main love. This flows smoothly & authentically. And I'm not a fan of love poems. It's gotta feel complex like real love, as you do so well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

LOVE: "His love for me is an elevant,
minor irritations
cease to be relevant"

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww thanks. I agree with you on love poems if they feel artificial, overly composed, or forced, they feel insincere, like an overblown sappy romance movie. Real life is a whole lot messier and complicated than that. Thanks! Muah

[Papaya]

too many wonderful lines, from first line "to lost count'
so uplifting, this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

Awww thank you

[Einstein Noodle]

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm love the back and forth of who she was and who she is ... elevating the relevant things is a deepening indeed ... a deedeed ;)
astounding how many break ups are based on how one holds a fork ... or hums when absorbed ... there is no getting past getting past those things when "in love" but knowing and feeling safe with another human being is blissful and well worth the loss of all our little "points" ... a wise and flowing true love poem for V-Day ... have a happy one Lyn!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much

[emmajoy]

' You .. smoothe my edges .. glow my cheeks .. steady my breath .. and tease out the crinkles .. in my smile.. ' Special love, that..

Have found that looking for anything is more often or not a no-no! As to love, fate will have not have its wicked way but the most beautiful. One hopes. prays. Your words, the way you place them, makes reading such a pleasure, more than. You've a way of tipping your hat and our gaze slides this way that til mesmerised.. content and admiring, Lyn. Yet another 'brava' for the unique skill you share. Me, green with envy, nevah... much! x

[Lyn Anderson]

Such a glowing and kind review. Thank you ever so much

[emmajoy]

Truly- you're very welcome. :)

[Chris Shaw]

How true this is. All those minor irritations cease to be relevant. That surely is love for you. Your lines remind me as well of that old saying, if you go looking for love, you won't find it. It has a habit of finding you when you least expect it. I like your journey here Lyn.

Chris

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in. I do appreciate

[redzone]

nice to be "found" Lyn isn't it... there were two lines that really struck me... "she needed a man, not a lover" and "from first kiss, to lost count".... and for me, that is "elevant" and a journey worth taking...

your poetry is amazing Lyn...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you soo much. I appreciate it

[¿]

Hmmhh... Wowee!!
I know twill take a lot of days, perhaps years for me to understand who's right for me to hug and take a vacation but I learned a little from your piece. ..
The way you said, she was fierce and her other qualities...I find all her expectations fair and valid....a heart shall resemble a coconut ;) searching the perfect man to see that heart's tender sight....
Thanks many for sharing this....enjoyed a lot in this drive!...
PS :- Can you please lemme know what elevant is....I desperately wanna grasp its meaning :)

[Lyn Anderson]

So sweet. Thank you. I took a bit of liberty with my English and created a neologism - Elevant - (noun) as in something or someone that elevates one to higher levels . I am glad you enjoyed. Never settle for less than someone who makes you better than you knew you could be

[¿]

Gotcha! I'd love to use this word be it in your neologism or in the main stream language..=)
..And, I'd try sticking on your advice...You're warmly welcomed :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Go ahead, maybe we'll make it into a mainstream word. :)