some people don't like it when I group poems together. I do it for three reasons - 1 - it seems ridiculous to post 6 or 8 poems back to back as separate pieces. 2 - I did think of them all in a group, one after the other. 3 - I think they work together, as well as separate, and can be taken as either by the reader. Image courtesy deviantart
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Lyn. As always I find your work to be an honest glimpse into the mind of a fine poet. These little vignettes add up to one fine piece of poetry, each tied to the other in a thoughtful progression, leading from beginning to end of a relationship. Tying all four together works brilliantly. Altogether an interesting bit of introspection.
At least you keep yourself organized! I cringe every time I start to try.
The emotions match in this grouping. They paint an image.
Besides. You write for you.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Oh but I do enjoy help if it is constructive. However tearing these apart didn't work. I think the.. read moreOh but I do enjoy help if it is constructive. However tearing these apart didn't work. I think the perception is somehow that these are rough notes that could be cobbled into one poem. But to me, they were always individual but connected thoughts.
6 Years Ago
Just curious. What was the time frame of the writes?
I was thinking more of the time between writes. Did you write them all back to back, or decide to co.. read moreI was thinking more of the time between writes. Did you write them all back to back, or decide to collect them?
6 Years Ago
Oh, ok, when I post these group poems that is exactlyhow they were written, in a set. However someti.. read moreOh, ok, when I post these group poems that is exactlyhow they were written, in a set. However sometimes I edit their order in the group in the formatting
6 Years Ago
Got it. I am still combining stuff. Some fall into a storyline. Others are new, while I add to my.. read moreGot it. I am still combining stuff. Some fall into a storyline. Others are new, while I add to my rambles!
I hope you won't listen to anyone who has a beef with your page layout. It's perfect for your approach. This is a stunning collection full of intensity. I'm reminded of a topic I hadn't heard about from you in a long time. Sometimes we just have to keep those channels cleansed of such lingering junk! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thanks dear friend. I suppose some days I try to change to suit others but generally I revert to wha.. read moreThanks dear friend. I suppose some days I try to change to suit others but generally I revert to what works for me. As always appreciate the visit
I love how you group your poems like this and I have always been a fan.
The thoughts are so connected that it makes sense to me.
That first one though, so good. Like holding your breath waiting for a punchline that never comes.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I appreciate the visit. I adore your work
I wouldn't really have realized these were separate poems if you hadn't mentioned. They do work nicely together. Love the second one and your strong closing line. Great write, Lyn.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you very much. I have been told not to be lazy, and make one complete poem. I wrote them as th.. read moreThank you very much. I have been told not to be lazy, and make one complete poem. I wrote them as they are, together, but separate. :)
This really is wonderful. It has so many stunning perceptions that it feels like a journey through a relationship, from the moment we wait for the dewdrops to fall, to the thought where we wonder if all we are doing is watering weeds, to the realisation that even in the beginning, we may have been ignoring the cracks all along.
I should have began by saying that is only what I got from it, but I wasn't the one living it. Your words always capture so well, the readers attention, leaving the words thought of long after reading.
So in summation...I like it :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Wow. How do I top that review? Thank you so much for taking the time
I have no problem with you placing four poems in one posting. I found it interesting because all the poems are based on a theme. All to do with the changing state in a relationship which started off promising and then falls apart. Laughter is my favourite, but they are all good reads.
Chris
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you very much. I suppose I feel a certain need to pre-explain rather than having to explain af.. read moreThank you very much. I suppose I feel a certain need to pre-explain rather than having to explain after the fact as I often have done with these collections
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