Nonsensical Verbosity

Enter my contest http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Poems-about-poetry/54829/

Your nonsensical verbosity

is poetical atrocity!

Artistic licence is too easy,

to justify your,  just too breezy,

wanton disregard for grammar rule;

necessities we were taught in school.

Language melds into monstrosity,

to prove your own virtuosity,

and so succumbs to simply sleazy.

Cakes, not bards, are meant to be cheesy.

A pen can be a powerful tool.

Use it wisely, or be proved a fool.

Author's Note

2 sextets of 9 syllable count, rhyme scheme aabbcc

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You make sestests sounds so easy, Lyn! This is cool and speaks my mind regarding the subject. Some times, I just shake my head at what people qualify as a piece of writing (not wanting to appear bigheaded here though)
"Cakes, not bards, are meant to be cheesy."
This made me laugh lol you def know how to give a virtual punch! :D

[Lyn Anderson]

I love my cheese cake. Thanks so much. You are a person whose writing, and evolution in that writing, is to be admired and emulated. :)

[Beccy]

It's the oft time lack of grammar and syntax that irritates me. I think no matter if it is your first ever attempt at the written word, or you are an experienced writer, there is no excuse for such laziness.

You hit a nerve here. :))

Beccy.

[Lyn Anderson]

I agree my friend. No excuse. Sloppy is just that, sloppy

[Lorry]

I am laughing at the thought that I, and many others after reading your words, will feel "Dealt with" :)
I have read so much not poetry, as well as being guilty of some too, that it amazes me that true poets heads don't just explode in disgust.
The pen is mightier than the sword, so it shouldn't really surprise us that people don't use it wisely and inflict damage onto themselves and the language. I really do have a cheek though, considering I make up so many worderations myself. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks much. I definitely wouldn't put your work in the careless nor the non- poem category.

[Lorry]

You are too kind :)

[Neville]

Very impressive... I must confess to finding anything with structure so fixed almost impossible to adhere to... just another reason why I admire true poets so..... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

Free verse is a form, my friend. What a poem is has voice, rhythm, structure, even if quirky. Moreover misspelling is fine if it's done with purpose and intent, same with breaking rules. It's more about taking a paragraph and just haphazardly breaking it into stanzas, and disregarding basic grammar and spelling

[Neville]

thank you for putting me in the picture and reinforcing my inadequacies ..... N

[Erudite]

Freakin love this poem! Excellent job

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for your enthusiastic review

[Fran Marie]

A delightful write here Lyn in form and content..with a keen message to watch our Ps and. Qs

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much m'lady!

[Lavi]

Very true. The last two lines are masterful. So wise you are. Reminds me of how I went off on an artist's view/moral once and someone replied that there is such a thing called Artistic Liberty I was ranting about... so it's nice to know it's real and that it (like everything else) is a double-edged sword. So, the pen is still mightier than the sword. In my opinion.

Great write! :D

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, thank you. I shall have to peruse your site. There is Artistic liberty and just plain old sloppy. If you break a rule, do it with grace and style and purpose. Don't just stick something up slip shod and pull "licence"

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha whimsical address to
pitfalls we pursue
to make line and rhyme at least
make .... do :)))))
i have to nail you on V2 L2 my friend! there is 8 not 9 :)))))
fun read ...great advice!
E.
ps. the form and rhyme you chose bids me read out loud ... and so i did

[Lyn Anderson]

Lol I omitted own in the edit. My bad

[Einstein Noodle]

;)....................

[Chris Shaw]

Humour here but with it comes a message to watch our presentation, language and grammar when we write. I hope it's not my turn for the naughty step. You of course raise important points Lyn.

Chris

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for reviewing. I have always seen your poems as thoughtful, entertaining, and well presented. Nary a correction necessary.:)

[angel]

Didja hafta shame me in public, Lyn? I mean, I know I take liberties with language, but...oh, it wasn't to me directly?
All right, then. In that case, I thought it was excellent...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for the review. Definitely not a personal shaming. :)