Sometimes poets tackling an intricate form seem to write with less intensity, as if more focused on form than message. That's why I love seeing how your writing stays bright & sparkling, so that this form is just a sideline enjoyment while your message takes center stage. Nobody writes about relationships the way you do. Love how you express your truths (((HUGS))) fondly Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I press delete if form overwhelms the message. I do find it a challenge, and I en.. read moreThank you so much. I press delete if form overwhelms the message. I do find it a challenge, and I enjoy the end result when it's done even if it frustrates me from time to time
You did well dear Lyn. Create a meaningful poetry with a message.
"Right now, you may think you have sway,
but children grow and learn.
One day your lies will open eyes;
your deeds are what you'll earn."
I do like the above lines a lot. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
makes for a n interesting rhythm ... Richard is so creative! your first verse is powerful says i ... sound wisdom in your theme ...the "break up" is difficult and tragic enough but a vengeful "X" who uses the children is so sad and destructive ... i like the high road your protagonist takes in this .. its proactive and i can feel the calm and peace attained by such an attitude ... bravo for taking on the form! ;)
E.
Sometimes poets tackling an intricate form seem to write with less intensity, as if more focused on form than message. That's why I love seeing how your writing stays bright & sparkling, so that this form is just a sideline enjoyment while your message takes center stage. Nobody writes about relationships the way you do. Love how you express your truths (((HUGS))) fondly Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I press delete if form overwhelms the message. I do find it a challenge, and I en.. read moreThank you so much. I press delete if form overwhelms the message. I do find it a challenge, and I enjoy the end result when it's done even if it frustrates me from time to time
First, you realize when I write in a pattern it is usually an accident?
Second, and being serious, I have come to believe some do not understand. They have no clue of the pain they are causing. If they happen to notice, it wasn't their fault. Oblivious of the damage being done.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thanks. Yes. This was a very deliberate pattern. You should try it sometime. Great exercise. :) it's.. read moreThanks. Yes. This was a very deliberate pattern. You should try it sometime. Great exercise. :) it's always someone else's fault, that's how they carry on ...
Children suffer so needlessly at the hands of those who are supposed to love them the most. Having experienced this first hand, I just believe that people are broken. They can't show love because they don't know love, have never known love, and were broken by someone who was broken too. It's an ugly cycle of abuse that eventually must be broken by one who has been abused. It breaks my heart to know that anyone suffers such abuse.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you for your very compassionate review. Yes. Abuse must be addressed, head on, and the cycle s.. read moreThank you for your very compassionate review. Yes. Abuse must be addressed, head on, and the cycle stopped
People look at revenge in their own way. I have never found a need for it. Besides, anyone who ever did anything to me usually had some bad things happen to them years later. Maybe there was more going on I didn't know about in the spirit world. haha.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
I haven't seen Karma in action yet but people keep telling me she's coming. However, a bitter heart .. read moreI haven't seen Karma in action yet but people keep telling me she's coming. However, a bitter heart is a heavy burden to bear through life
6 Years Ago
It really is true. We are what we eat, and what we think.
"more than vows make a home."
This sole line stands out to me in your piece. Such a sharp write and something deeply personal (I felt).
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you very much and yes, that line, while it is a slight hitch in the rhythm of the piece, could.. read moreThank you very much and yes, that line, while it is a slight hitch in the rhythm of the piece, could not be replaced. :)
Aw, Lyn,
Such a deeply poignant, but beautifully struck verse, M'Dear.
One would be hard-pressed to find a more smoothly rendered flow or more perfectly rhymed lines, scored in more grammatical or syntactic perfection.
The emotion and angst virtually jumping out from every line is perceptively intense and impacting, and your message could not be more clearly framed; I feel such endearing compassion for the kids … and Thee.
And, what could thrust more deeply than:
"You cannot be here beside me,
instead, you hide in them.
Your words they spit; your blows they hit ...
your vengeful requiem."
What an honor to have such an accomplished artist paint intrinsically gripping, vivid images in one of my own forms, and flawlessly, I might ad.
You do me great honor, Lady Lyn 🍂 most grateful hugs! ⁓ Richard
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Well thank you very much, for your help, your guidance, and your lovely poetic forms. I think all po.. read moreWell thank you very much, for your help, your guidance, and your lovely poetic forms. I think all poets who write in free verse should expand their horizons and write in form, and vice versa. Staying inside our comfort bubbles doesn't let us grow as artists. I recommend you to all the newbies, if they ask for direction.:)
6 Years Ago
So,
THAT'S why I never have any spare time … LOL!
Few acknowledge my Free Verse and .. read moreSo,
THAT'S why I never have any spare time … LOL!
Few acknowledge my Free Verse and Free Style pieces, but I've many on here I'd love you take on, Lyn, and anyone else who cares to partake.
True, why would anyone want to suppress or limit their poetic potential. Everything we study, learn, and master improves and hones the excellence of our skills.
You made poetry and helping a delightful pleasure … thank You, Lyn! : )
I write under a pseudonym.
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