with Teeth

Title inspired by nature and Trent Reznor

The rain had teeth that day

I saw the crooked finger of God 

Spread the Devil's legs 

In a complacent sky. 

We were together the day 

I bought my favorite umbrella. 

Funny such things should even 

Be held in my head.  

An umbrella is no comfort 

On days 

When the rain 

Has teeth

Author's Note

Reviews

[KCthelastboyscout]

Man is insignificant to the force of nature. Reading this your words of imagery are brilliant. not familiar with the song but very much familiar with the artist. Johnny Cash version of Hurt Brilliant

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for reading and reviewing

[Coyote Poetry]

Rain that had teeth. A great storm. Your description made the reader believe and understand your words. Thank you Lyn for sharing the amazing poetry. I liked this one.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you kindly dear sir. I love your poetry

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Lyn and I love your work also.

[Neville]

Great new poem, tastes just like the old you.... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

Well sometimes we regress. :)

[Neville]

and dont it feel good........

[Papaya]

I absolutely LOVE the second and third lines. Wow!
Really great piece! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you darling. You, of all people, get me more than almost anyone in here.

[Papaya]

You are welcome :)

[redzone]

not sure the sky was complacent as it allowed that toothy rain to unleash it's fury... I love watching rain like this from the comfort of my front window... it's beautiful to see... but there is deeper meaning here and that kind of rain is hard to take...

there is really only one thing to say, Lyn, your poetry rocks...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. You are too kind. And I hate auto correct. It forced me to delete my first comment. This was a scribble crafted while waiting for pizza in a storm that reminded me of something I had put away in that box that slithers with things I'd rather forget

[Jon Roggie]

I am trying to grasp this one. I may be digging too deep. It also feels like a someone's umbrella got trashed in a storm.

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh most definitely. It was a deep wound, revealed in a particular storm

[Jon Roggie]

I feel a story growing....

[Sami Khalil]

Very different and unique. Imaginative and coming across as with teeth and nails. Teeth can carry many meanings.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. A bit of an homage to a ghost of a thing that has teeth. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I like. You are welcome.

[Delmar Cooper]

Everything seems perfect, with the possible quibble about God’s crooked finger spreading the devil’s legs. I don’t quite know what to make of that one so I file it under poetic license. How many points do you have on that license now? I do appreciate a rain with teeth, once bitten etc… Really a lovely piece of work.

[Lyn Anderson]

I remember you well. Once you helped me change something that was good into something much better. That ugly thing is something the subject behind this poem would say, feeling himself clever. Hence, I take my poetic licence with pleasure.:) I have put a lot of points on that magic card over the years. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

I sent you something I ran across.