love memorandums

thoughts on today

I sat to write tanka,
but the third line escaped me,
I wrote this poem,
but my brain began counting,
all the syllables in you.

it's so easy to fall asleep next to you.
it's so hard to stay asleep next to you.

you needn't worry
as long as I want you
more than I need you,
we'll be just fine.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, wanting more than needing is the key to a good relationship. No one wants to be in a needy situation. KL, all the syllables of YOU are wonderful...no need to count them for sure. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much! My parents, together 50 years, my mom says the secret is they both know they can go it alone, but they choose each other every day.:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Smart lady!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love is perfect but we are not,but when we try love will always beat even if it is not in rhytem.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for your thoughts.

[J. K. Beach]

This is a case where the whole is much more than the sum of its parts (and the parts are exquisite). Your images fall as softly on my mind as that sweet post-"wanting" nap. Great stuff!

[Lyn Anderson]

Nice to see you. Thank you, I appreciate it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is what keeps people together...it is wanting more than needing...once we start needing, that kills it on both side...

love the first part of this so much..."counting all the syllables in you"---what a line.

i am trying to stay awake next to your poem...but i fall asleep cuddling with it...and then want to wake again to keep reading more...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for your most lovely and poetic review. :)

[Papaya]

Those two lines say so much.
It's been a long time since I've felt comfortable enough to sleep with someone. A good restful sleep. And the person that enables that feeling of peace is the one you want to stay awake with too. I like this

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks darling. There is a little glitch in it I noticed. I will have to fix.

[Papaya]

I overlooked it. :)
It happens to me all the time.