shaking the bitter

another collaborative effort with Jon Roggie and Papaya http://www.writerscafe.org/AnaPapaya http://www.writerscafe.org/jtrogue

Look at the gathering fog,
and feel my forced smile.
shake it off,
bitter is not my way ...

trap my tears
where they begin,
no need to allow
their salty pain in ...

while the feelings
are still there,
time has passed
if not the memories ...

they are where
they should reside
in another life,
with the other me ...

framed within
the glass of time,
each grain of sand
a brand new day ...

seeping slowly
from the fog
let not this love,
my life, fade away.

Author's Note

http://www.writerscafe.org/AnaPapaya
http://www.writerscafe.org/jtrogue

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the other me...the one in the past---oh but he is always trying to catch up...

it is hard to let go...it is hard to shake that fog.

really nice collaboration...sounds like one voice, not three...well blended...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. The three of us do play really well off of each other -- and it does work as one voice -- we get along well for three people who have not physically met living in different cities.

[Papaya]

Jacob,
Thank you so much. I feel honoured to be among such talent here and these two are not just talented but really good people too, like so many us. Certain exceptions apply.

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you. It was fun!

[barleygirl]

Nicely melancholy statement describing the struggle of bitterness with many vivid & creative phrases . . . my fave: "they are where they should reside in another life, with the other me ..."

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much for your stopping by. Jon started this one, and then was a "slavedriver" as we were all busy and put it on the back burner for a few days ...

[Papaya]

Thanks from me too BG!!!!

[Jon Roggie]

The bad part was we had two different writes floating out there. I think they are still talking to me....
Glad you liked it.

[Lyn Anderson]

ya ya you are such a pain.:):)

[Jon Roggie]

Don't listen to them. I am a complete monster.

[barleygirl]

Love watching you guys have fun *smile*

[Inject Positivity]

"while the feelings/are still there/time has passed/if not the memories..." so very well said... The poem brings some peaceful thoughts in my mind which I love... The ending leaves a hopeful note... Lovely work by 3 of you...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Jon Roggie]

Thank you. This was a work finished after missed messages, nagging by my part, and finally, we wound up with this. The final lines arrived a few hours ago. As long as the other two put up with me, I can't wait to see what happens next!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks very much. This one was started, and then life intervened. In the end I think it turned out very nice.

[Papaya]

Thanks from me too Dhiman!

[Papaya]

Super final product. Mwah.

[Lyn Anderson]

Mwah to you too. If only work and raising kids was as easy as working with you two.:)

[Papaya]

Oh yeah, ditto that.
I am all alone this week though. So quiet without the kids.
I would welcome the chaos! :!

[Jon Roggie]

It is certainly easier than dealing with a fourteen year old. This one feels different. I mean better.