one of my favorites written by you, it has a certain edge that wows, that's really your niche, forming words around words provided, excellent work.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks, funny, I find it's one of my faves too - yes - a story around a set of words does work for m.. read moreThanks, funny, I find it's one of my faves too - yes - a story around a set of words does work for me.
I'm probably way off base with my intepretation. I keep thinking of Scott Walkers songs. But aside from that I find the word usage here simply superb and extremly evocative.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Not knowing who Scott Walker is, I couldn't tell you. This is a poem of grief and loss, Lydia's revi.. read moreNot knowing who Scott Walker is, I couldn't tell you. This is a poem of grief and loss, Lydia's review is probably the closest to what was going through my mind as I wrote it.
8 Years Ago
One of the Walker brothers. The song No Regrets of The Sun Don't shine Anymore is what I'm hearing. .. read moreOne of the Walker brothers. The song No Regrets of The Sun Don't shine Anymore is what I'm hearing. But as I said I'm probably way off base. Still feel this is a very powerful write.
I've just read Lydi's review as well.
Very interesting collection of thoughts & actions as he bumbles thru the various aspects of grief & loss . . . kind of disjointed sounding, as one's thoughts might be at a time like this. When I read the title, I was on a completely different track, reminded of an oral session from way back, when I had nothing to wash it down. Your use of the selected words is seamless & not even noticeable except for the bold font. Love this: "His need to perforate holes In the wall of grief around him"
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks. I really do like these contests. The bold font is the one downside, but I understand it make.. read moreThanks. I really do like these contests. The bold font is the one downside, but I understand it makes it easier for her to judge the poems. Were I to publish them elsewhere, I would remove the bold type face. And, yeah, the title was intentionally misleading. :)
You have used those words to create perfection... Loved the way you have created an emotional thought provoking write with those words... The poem speaks clearly... Very well done...
Sincerely
Dhiman
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you very much. I do admit I am pleased with the results of this challenge.
I write under a pseudonym.
I don't do Read Requests, but you can PM me if you want me to read something specific. I make friends with people who I read and interact with. I won't accept random reque.. more..