scattered reflections

a collaboration with the tortoise, aka Jon Roggie http://www.writerscafe.org/jtrogue

Falling into the mirror,
watching all the
scattered reflections,
who is looking
back at me;
why can't I see?

Feeling my way,
lost in a shattered world,
intricate pieces that do not fit --
a puzzle without instruction,
trying to find out
how to make it whole.

Author's Note

written with Jon Roggie

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

It is disheartening to see many events unfold and shaterring to our humanity when things transpire in evil. But we are resilient and adaptable and I do hope we will make it through. Thank you for pouring out your heart...:)...................

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, it is, thank you Sami, Jon started the thought, I just helped him along.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome along with him...:)))))

[Jon Roggie]

I will be honest, KL helped me on this one. The writing is easy, but moving past emotions takes a bit more work. Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

:)))))))).........

[sharonlee]

Feeling this... sometimes life seems too surreal and unreal to be real.

[Lyn Anderson]

Most definitely. The disjointed feeling came naturally, as Jon Roggie and I wrote our parts back and forth. Thank you for commenting.

[Jon Roggie]

Just to put it out there, KL was able to catch my feelings. Not many writers are able to do that. Next, this is a feeling which seems to be hovering. We must move forward.

[sharonlee]

It quickens a writers' spirit when another writer can do that.

And I agree, we, as a Global society must move forward, more cohesively, with more understanding and acceptance of difference. We all came from somewhere- perhaps the same place,eh?

[Alfred Kukitz]

Love the opening line (I wish it were mine). The confusion presentation made this piece all the more interesting. Fine write KL!

Regards,
Al

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I think. Jon Roggie was my partner, and he started it.:)

[Jon Roggie]

Now, she does the pass. This is an instance where the words work. We do not know how they will be taken. Writing them? ;)

[barleygirl]

I'm trying to avoid writing about the immensity of the grief that people are experiencing lately. It's just too unfathomable to comment on, for me. I applaud you for trying to get your words around what's going on in the world & also in people's individual lives, people that we care about. There's too much sorrow right now. You've done a great job of expressing how this is coming across to all of us, in some way or another. A broken mirror reflecting shards of everything is a powerful image to use here (((HUGS)))

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. This poem was prompted by Jon Roggie, whose work has been leaning in that direction since these last incidences that have shaken the country and the world. I understand what you are saying, preferring to hunker down in my own little corner.

[barleygirl]

I might have to start making my coffee MUCH STRONGER in the morning, before I sit down to read so many of the sorrow-filled pieces posted here recently. The collective grief is immense!

[Jon Roggie]

In my defense, it was not planned. A simple phrase was suggested, and we wound up with this. I keep telling KL not to let me start one of these off! Plus, she has to do all of the work.

[barleygirl]

(((HUGS))) *smile* . . .

[Einstein Noodle]

identity is tough ..good thing it typically becomes an issue of growth and development during the teens (according to Erikson that is) Lord have mercy ..what a terrible time ..so glad i am "old" now ;) i like your use of the mirror ..looking into it shattered says so many things ... all complications to finding one's true self ... some never do :( most of them my in-laws bruahahahahah!
:)
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Very clever, my friend. Jon's words brought out the teenage angst in me for sure -- this really feels like a poem I would've written way back when ... p.s. you have a few new ones to read;)

[Jon Roggie]

Remember, I am having to deal with a 14 year old niece. I dodged this kind of situation for my entire life!

[Einstein Noodle]

KL i re-posted one that i did with Freida as i mentioned i was going to ..not sure if you have read it yet ..and am working on one that should be along soon .. i am struggling to commit it to a classic form so it is taking a bit of time :} thank you for asking .. to Mr. Turtle ;) God bless you for stepping up to help with your teen niece ... good luck! i raised 2 boys and 2 young ladies pretty much as a widowed, single dad .. no one will ever convince me that boys are harder than girls to raise ..no no no! hang in there ... when they struggle with identity ..the parent (or uncle) becomes an enforcer ... choose the battles wisely ..try real hard to listen ..not react ..and keep a steady hand on the rules and hugs .. ;)
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, I did read it, I swore I commented, is that your alzheimer's or mine?

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes you commented ..must be mine ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

The question of identity ... I once concluded that I had a million identities ...I do not mean in a Sybil way ... but rather everyone who ever thinks on you will view you differently and differently on different days. Best to see yourself as you would have yourself and embrace it. Clever imagery-driven write here. Pass on my praise to Jon, as well:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping by our little number. Jon is one of those easy people with whom things just make sense when he drops a line in your inbox.:)

[Jon Roggie]

Don't listen to her. I am a complete nightmare. I write a few words, and make her do the the rest of the work, just so I will let her get some sleep.

[Pryde Foltz]

yes she is on Toronto time:)

[Jon Roggie]

I feel I am being discriminated against because I live on the west coast. I am still awake by about 8 or 9 their time.

[Pryde Foltz]

I here ya ... it is tough living in paradise:)

[Pryde Foltz]

Vancouver girl here:)

[Jon Roggie]

I am a little east of paradise. Porterville might as well be the dust bowl.

[Pryde Foltz]

Come on ... you got a lake called Success ... seriously I am going to swimming in Success ...lol.

[Jon Roggie]

Sadly, Success has been half full. I could go on, but I think I will move this to another write. KL is going to berate me if I bring too much negativity.

[Lyn Anderson]

berate you? that's pretty harsh. Tease you maybe.:)

[Jon Roggie]

You have claws. I only have a shell.