a compilation poem -- I think it passes the no pink bar test ...
I wake with you on my mind the rational side of me that knows the now that cannot be still wants you in my bed not just in my head. there are a million reasons things are perfect just as they are but I still can't help wishing on that star.
in the heart of you there is a question burning what makes your love stay?
when you leave me soaked in a puddle stray tears of pure emotion
I know why you do
after a perfect night rolled into morning encore finish replay in my mind
Sublime pen ... romantic love doth inspire thee. No pink bar test?
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I think there isn't a bar warranted with this one, although the matureRatings police may disagree.
8 Years Ago
I was curious what a 'pink bar test' is. It is new term for me. Ans yes ... I would not label it mat.. read moreI was curious what a 'pink bar test' is. It is new term for me. Ans yes ... I would not label it mature ... you are speaking in metaphors ... if the young set know what you are talking about they didn't get it from you:)
ahh ... slow here ... pink ... as in pretty in pink:):):)
8 Years Ago
The question was sincere ... I did not know what a pink bar test was. Any offence taken was not mean.. read moreThe question was sincere ... I did not know what a pink bar test was. Any offence taken was not meant.
8 Years Ago
Oh my goodness, I thought the question was sincere from the onset.:)
I might be in too morose a state of mind to truly embrace your fine word crafting here. Some days it seems that every thing you click on to read ends up being a sadness-provoking message . . . so your poems of being left & longing here are really resonating right now.
The first one is my life story, still dreaming of things I've already decided are not good for my spirit. The third one reminds me of how, becuz we know why a person must leave (or is otherwise not being a good supportive friend), we don't feel justified in speaking of how much it hurts. Like we're supposed to turn off that "true response" switch, just becuz we know or understand where the abandonment comes from. So true-to-life, as your writing always is! (((HUGS)))
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I understand how that is sometimes. There was a time I hated love poetry and balked at love songs, a.. read moreI understand how that is sometimes. There was a time I hated love poetry and balked at love songs, as they didn't bring me to a great place. Not so much things not good, but things not NOW - longing yes, but happiness and acceptance too. Thank you. xo.
the first one speaks to me of wanting that 'next level' which depending on what level you're at could be moving in or maybe marriage. when things are going well we can't help but wonder and want the 'more'. It's natural growth. The last one was very moving. Wanting someone to stay when they have to go. But you can't keep them, only trust that they will keep coming back. (until you reach the next level and they're their 24/7?)
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Yes, it isn't sadness, but reality and understanding. Thank you.
Love has no explanation, no reason. Why is someone so precious? This question often cannot be answered.
A beautiful longing can be felt in this poem. I love the flow and smoothness of each line.
I have enjoyed reading your poems Kl, all of them... but this one is one of your best I believe and one of my favorites... your words are felt, felt deeply.. the emotion and love are tangible and just fly from the page.. it is a poem you can get lost in the knowing yet wanting and needing more and stated nicely in the "puddles"... and it is a fair question KL, that middle, one that will eventually need an answer I think...
not sure what you mean in your note about passing the no pink test, but for me, the poem and the way you feel about him, passes any and every test!!!
redzone
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I meant the dreaded Mature tag. :) Thanks I am really happy with this piece.
beautifully said ..the leaving does lend a sense of loss and emptiness ... creating the wanting ..complexities of life can keep the staying from happening ..(as well as other "stuff" more selfish) the two choose ..one to knock the other to open ... the interludes spectacular ... and then the longing .. until the next knocking comes ;)
really like your poem KL ... its a wonderful place for some people ... warmth, love, and honesty tumbling up together ... no strings ..the past has made them too scary
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You get it. You really do. We are never really apart, not in an emotional sense. For now, this is th.. read moreYou get it. You really do. We are never really apart, not in an emotional sense. For now, this is the best either of us can muster, and it is always worth the days between (that sounds like a poem to me) -- and I am off ...:)
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