your words are like hospital jello

your words are like hospital jello

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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meaningless drivel that popped into my head -- for barley girl, and kale, whom I do not know, but would like to know better.

"
Free flowing prose does not lack form nor intent.
It isn't hospital jello, not the kind in the cubes
with the deplorable skin. It doesn't lack shape
like red soup. There is purpose in its apparent
lack of structure. A goal in its string of words
looped across the page in a line. Words written
onto a page in a particular fashion with particular
emotion telling a particular story do not show
potential. Their potential has been realized,
and is splayed out, for the world to see. One of
my best pieces is a prose piece. Written after
a mad dream. There was no other way to write
it out but in one long stream
of consciousness.

amorphous words
lacking reason
careless thoughts
perhaps not meant
to be unkind
but glib and arrogant
nonetheless
have no place
at the table of
word epicureans
like jello has no place
in hospitals.



© 2016 Lyn Anderson


Author's Note

Lyn Anderson
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Oh jello. Love this metaphor...
We feed it to the elderly instead of real things too.
Good one, friend.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate you stopping by.
One can only get to the golden words by mining through the junk first.

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

I hope that means you found what you were looking for.
Alfred Kukitz

8 Years Ago

While swimming I decided to dive deep!
writing is like a good meal...and the entrees can be presented in many different ways...
and they can all taste good, even if they don't all look the same or have the same shape or form.

but then there is dessert...and jello moves in different ways and appears in different ways...and it goes down easy...that's why we find it in hospitals...

maybe sometimes our words need to be in the hospital to recover...or perhaps we need to be there to recover from writing them.

i like this poem, lots.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate my conversations with barleygirl, and her ocd poem, which were co-.. read more
We form and display our thoughts in a way that makes sense to us.
Not all poetry is for everyone.
Just like I hate orange and lemon jello, but I do LOVE lime and strawberry.
Love the jello, not all flavours. Did that make sense? Because to me it did.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Papaya

8 Years Ago

Phew. :)
I'm glad someone around here gets me.
Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

I am pretty sure a lot of people do.
Papaya

8 Years Ago

That's true. I'm not really that complex. :)
Great message! I love the way your approach is almost the opposite of mine, even tho we are saying essentially the same thing. That's the beauty of creative pursuits . . . & why there can be a million poems written about one topic, but each word-crafter approaches it differently. I love the way you use the "eating/food" analogy thru-out, especially in the final stanza, where this great word crafting is spot on: arrogance has no place at the table of word epicureans . . .

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thanks darlin' - I loved yours too, and I so enjoy our discourse. If I can open my mind to look at a.. read more
Smiling... interesting piece... my poetry is all over ... some neat as a pin, some spewed across the page as if written under demonic possession.

I'm a bit of an aging hippy rebel and rarely like being told what to do.... or how to do it... things like Cinquain, Iambic pentameter, Quatrain etc just constrain me too much.

I don't mind a haiku from time to time and find haibun ok... but mostly I just go with the flow, rhyming, not rhyming, rhyming in the middle... raving on, as I have now... lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I sometimes feel I must help newer writers out. They need confidence building their own s.. read more
sharonlee

8 Years Ago

Your welcome... I always try to be positive to.
I'm off to bed... it's a dark cold winter nig.. read more
barleygirl

8 Years Ago

I'm pretty good at structure & rhyme & rhythm in my poems, but I literally BRISTLE when I hear these.. read more
It's been more than 7 months since I have joined this website, and I have read more than thousands of writings most of them are poems... There are so many ways to write them, so if we do not how a particular writing has been written it's okay but that doesn't mean that writing has no flow or form, it has been written with a special purpose in mind... Whom am I to tell the poet that the poem has a great meaning and then write it off by saying "but you missed rhyming, and structure"... It only shows our lack of appreciation...

It's a very true write and carries the meaning what barleygirl said in her poem on OCD... I agree with you in all the points that you have made...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thank you. This poem most definitely comes from a conversation with barleygirl, whom I mentioned in .. read more
i agree ..it is not so much the form but the content and flow (or strings) of words that either capture or not ..our imaginations, and emotions ... artists do it with pictures and conductors do it with sounds ;) a fine "hats off" to prose ... and your "hospital jello" is enviable ..very creative says i! knew just what you were talking about having worked in a hospital for years ... :) your title, however, is contrary to your content ... ???? i like Melanie's voice ... thanks for sharing it ..i am not in touch with main stream ..let alone ally ways and hidden off road lanes .. :)
E.
ps i most always brought my own lunch to work

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. This piece was spawned by some reviews I have seen lately. I have had many such.. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

you are a wonderful advocate my friend! i like all forms and from time to time do try a rigid approa.. read more

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