A desperado he became

I almost forgot I wrote this one -- ten words I give contest -- after the poem is judged I take out the highlighted words so they don't detract from the poem

When the gavel fell,

It was a constant playback

Inside his mind.

The clack of the latch,

Produced the ricochet

Just behind his eye

Like his granny rocking

In her most admonishing tone.

It would do no good

To snoop into this fiasco,

The twelfth of twelve

Found him guilty

Of a crime he

Did not commit.

Armani exchanged for

An orange jump suit,

Wilted lettuce in place of

Water cress,

And a desperado

He became.

Author's Note

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This is great! A lot of times, poems written for contests like this contain lines that seem a little forced - the writer reaches a bit too much to fit in the necessary words. (But having never participated in one of these challenges myself, I really can't judge - I am sure it's quite difficult to make everything fit neatly.) However, having said that, I think you did an excellent job in incorporating these words into your poem. I like the way you included the "granny rocking" memory - rather than feeling out-of-place, it fits in perfectly to how someone would react to such a life-altering decision. When faced with traumatic events, the most bizarre, random things come to our minds, oddly making sense in a way only we would understand in that context. Overall, very nicely written!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I find these word challenges exceptionally good for stretching the imagination -- having read your recent poem I would think you would be well suited to such a challenge. There is a new one on and I am not going to miss the deadline this time.

[AliciaB]

Thanks! I don't know... a bit out of my zone, but maybe I'll give it a try. :)

[Pryde Foltz]

A twist of fate, hey. Great word and sound combo:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you darling, as always.

[Papaya]

Love the way to worked these words.
The twelfth of twelve... nice work there in particular.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I am going to try the next one, and not miss the deadline this time.:)

[Papaya]

I'm glad you overlooked that there typo.... :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I figured you meant you.

[Lyn Anderson]

I wrote this one, and forgot to post it before the deadline. Oh well, I posted it anyway without entering. This really is a great contest to stretch your creative muscles.