This is a smooth collaboration and one that speaks with one voice indeed. So wonderfully woven together :) Lingers in the soul a little this one, a delicate brush of something tangible and haunting. Brilliant piece :)
Speaking for myself, this felt easy. When you get to play with writers, you could expect some kind o.. read moreSpeaking for myself, this felt easy. When you get to play with writers, you could expect some kind of friction. This seemed to write itself. Now, the other two may strangle me.
8 Years Ago
Thank you very much -- friction? never. Well, maybe only the good kind:)
8 Years Ago
Hi Poppy, I'll throw my thanks in here too. These guys are awesome as you probably already know.read moreHi Poppy, I'll throw my thanks in here too. These guys are awesome as you probably already know.
: )
I am not sure if this is a correct interpretation but this is what I got from it that our past is a story. Those regrets, those moments are the ones that make our story and our story needs to be put down on paper for others to see. I got the others to see from the 'footprints" because that what footprints do let others know you were here or there. It a a beautiful poem and thank you so much to all the authors for writing this and sharing. Laters, N.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Hello, thank you for reviewing and the compliment, and your considered interpretation of the poem.
N - thank you for popping in to read this. I do appreciate it and your review is so thoughtful as a.. read moreN - thank you for popping in to read this. I do appreciate it and your review is so thoughtful as always.
8 Years Ago
Your Welcome and thank you for not keep this beautiful writing to yourself and sharing. N.
Really beautiful. I didn't notice there were multiple writers. Great job!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Please visit the other writers' pages as well. The goal of a collaboration is always one voice. Than.. read morePlease visit the other writers' pages as well. The goal of a collaboration is always one voice. Thank you.
Thanks Nessly for the kind words and for reading. KL is and Jon are two of the finest people here.<.. read moreThanks Nessly for the kind words and for reading. KL is and Jon are two of the finest people here.
There are others of course... I appreciate you coming to read this blend of thoughts into one voice.
8 Years Ago
You're welcome! :)
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As usual, I show up late. The comment I love the most is you didn't notice there were multiple writ.. read moreAs usual, I show up late. The comment I love the most is you didn't notice there were multiple writers. We seem to blend.
at over 111 pages, not likely to stop posting soon. Thank you for stopping in.
8 Years Ago
Thank you Raven, for reading this. two super duper poets I am fortunate to have as friends pulled m.. read moreThank you Raven, for reading this. two super duper poets I am fortunate to have as friends pulled me into this.
not easy for three to become one eh!? :) the ending is what really gets me ... most alluding to the pen is of power and permanence ... but you guys run true ..everything becomes dust once again ... some days there are way to many echos bouncing around me own noodle .. Norma should take the car keys away from me on those days ... ;)
memories and echos and chronicles ... great stuff in my opinion ... a pleasant journey tho closing in dust .. yes ... i believe i am ready for that :O
E.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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I think you have a few more years before dust. Thank you!
Hi E. I'll throw my thanks in here. KL and Jon really made this one easy. I typically don't gel w.. read moreHi E. I'll throw my thanks in here. KL and Jon really made this one easy. I typically don't gel well with many.
8 Years Ago
not always an easy thing for sure! styles and approaches can be in direct opposition yet all valid ... read morenot always an easy thing for sure! styles and approaches can be in direct opposition yet all valid .. you guys did a great job!
Wow, this was really good, you can't tell there was more than one writer.
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8 Years Ago
That is the magic of the cross continental mind meld we have going. :) Thank you.
8 Years Ago
I have to admit this feels good. If it wasn't mentioned, I don't think anyone would have noticed mo.. read moreI have to admit this feels good. If it wasn't mentioned, I don't think anyone would have noticed more than one voice. Thank you.
wow, a "tri-llab"...triple the snaps for this poem... you blended well each others words and the ending hits you.. "dust".. I enjoyed reading the blended three of you - Jon, KL, Papaya...
redzone
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I owe the magic of the flow totally to my lady, and the resonant echoes to Jon.
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KL, I am sure Jon played a big part in this tri-llab (I want to call it "The JKPs") no doubt... but .. read moreKL, I am sure Jon played a big part in this tri-llab (I want to call it "The JKPs") no doubt... but knowing you (a ring leader, outside agitator if I ever saw one ;0p) and as Jon mentioned below you edited, then I think you are being a wee bit modest.. lol and I also see Papaya smiling in the background thinking she has escaped attention, but I know she too had a hand in getting the "tortoise" to move faster!!! Sorry Jon I couldn't resist the tease...
anyway, to all three of you, "The JKPs", I for one would always enjoy a tri-llab..
8 Years Ago
I'm just happy they let me play in the same sandbox red... :)
Thank you.
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but I think you brought the shovels and little buckets didn't you.. ;0)
I suppose, sure. :) I bring the tools that allow them to build and just sit back and watch it happe.. read moreI suppose, sure. :) I bring the tools that allow them to build and just sit back and watch it happen. It's the lazy poet approach.
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too funny, and like KL too modest!!! Jon I need your help here... lol
8 Years Ago
I let them do the hard work. I just ramble on for a couple of lines.
Wow. That was brilliant. Reading that spoke to my emotions. That title and the equivalent line is just so deep and amazing. I really loved this. You're a great writer.
The line that you speak of, and the title, comes from Jon Roggie -- we collaborated together with ~P.. read moreThe line that you speak of, and the title, comes from Jon Roggie -- we collaborated together with ~Papaya~ and when it was pieced together, I edited it. The formatting and repetition are courtesy ~Papaya~ -- her very smart vision of my words that brought it all together.
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Hi Michael, thank you. Jon deserves as much credit here as KL. While I often use repetition, that w.. read moreHi Michael, thank you. Jon deserves as much credit here as KL. While I often use repetition, that was his suggestion. Very much appreciate that you enjoyed our collective effort.
8 Years Ago
Don't listen to them. I just stopped by for a moment.
I write under a pseudonym.
I don't do Read Requests, but you can PM me if you want me to read something specific. I make friends with people who I read and interact with. I won't accept random reque.. more..