Run to you

thoughts on running

where a blood moon dripped
in a dark winter sky
the yellow moon rises
on a warm summer night

this is where it began

I ran
from him.

my breath quickens
in anticipation
heart pounds
in sheer elation

every part of me is alive

raise my hands
outstretched;
feel the wind
ripple through

my hair
my skin.


freedom one more step away

concrete beat
under my feet
it has begun
again.

to you
I run.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the way you describe the moon, showing contrasts, in the first stanza. Your description of physical sensations shows us so much more . . . more than conveying actual feelings, we almost SEE the effect this moment has on the narrator. It's feeling like a true sense of ESCAPE, the way you've stated it here. Nicely vivid & sensory.

[Lyn Anderson]

That was definitely the goal, so I am glad it came across that way. Thank you.

[Lydia Shutter]

Running away from one and into the arms of another....the feeling of empowerment and freedom is palpable. I could feel the wind hitting my face and I ran with you. Great work. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Running began with no destination in mind. Except sanity. It brought me to a place I needed to be.

[V]

Nice vivid images, a breathless, lovely anticipation of something good such as love. I could feel the air and your gasps, love how much this one feels real and alive.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I started running to survive my horrible marriage. To escape. It ended up being a literal escape, and led to something much better. I tried as best I could to capture that feeling.

[V]

I figured. I think it was the best thing you could do and I'm glad that you managed to flee from the dreadfulness.

[redzone]

so Bryan Adams is Canadian ...EH! didn't know this but it doesn't matter, its a good song as are many of his others... ditto what everyone else observed about the first stanza, one of your best openings I've read... and in running, you not only ran from abuse but ran to the strength in you and to finding someone who loves you the way you deserve... so I conclude, running is good for you!! ;0)

for me could it be swimming??? Think Bryan Adams will change the words to "I will swim to you"?? guess my only chance is to find a mermaid...

really did enjoy reading your poem KL

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. Yes. We have this weird thing here in Canada called "Canadian content" so -- even though he is famous for the love song from Robin Hood, (Everything I do) he wasn't considered Canadian content for that song due to the American contribution.

[Papaya]

I absolutely love that opening stanza. A perfect transition from night to day, dark to light, past to future.
Super poem KL. And of course I love Bryan Adams.

[Lyn Anderson]

I am. Canadian. Thanks. I was hoping it came across that way. I often lament not leaving my abusive relationship sooner. However, without the struggles, I may not have discovered my passion for running, nor my current love, and the freedom with him I so enjoy. So sometimes, we have to accept that the bad led us to the good.

[Papaya]

Yes, exactly. The bad is bad but if we survive it then I think it's like the light at the end of the tunnel. There are good things on the other side. It's just such a long friggin tunnel. :)
I'm going to follow your lead on the I am Canadian poem.

[Lyn Anderson]

yay! We'll post as feature for July 1 -- come on Pryde -- NoelHC, who else? We can be loud and proud ...

[Papaya]

Ok, sounds good to me!

[Einstein Noodle]

first verse touches me ...the blood moon so impressive ... an "end" ... with a yellow moon rising ..on a new and summer day ..i love it! the imagery and meaning is subtle in its beauty but very ominous and powerful as well ... how terrifying to raise ones hands and arms in joyful freedom ... your closing a trepidatious beginning .. ;)
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

It is both literal and figurative. I was looking directly at the yellow moon as I ran.

[Einstein Noodle]

:)))) ........ peace and joy my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the harder we run away from someone, we often end up running even harder toward that person...
because we just can't get them out of our heart...

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you for your vision - - it very much is about running to someone new, but I see how it could be perceived that way.