Fine forms of love

experimenting with form again

This is to me,

A dream I feel,

It cannot be,

That something real --

Imagined love.

 

I watch you sleep,

Hold your heart beat,

Inside me keep,

Your tender heat --

Tangible love.

 

My hand you clasp,

Upon your chest,

Return your grasp;

Part I like best --

Palpable love.

 

My own decree,

A sacred seal,

In you I see,

A truthful deal --

Virtuous love.

 

Quiet and deep,

Whisper me sweet,

Into one seep,

Two souls do meet --

Forever love.

Author's Note

http://www.writerscafe.org/RichardJ
"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire,
United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules: No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum,
each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is
author's choice.
I chose rhyme abab, cdcd, efef, abab, cdcd, with the
additional pattern of repetition of a different kind
of love at the end of each stanza.

Reviews

[Papaya]

I like this experiment with a new form. :)
It's a gorgeous poem of all things 'love'

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you darling. Trying to expand my horizons.

[Papaya]

Always good to try new things!
You always pull it off so effortlessly too. :)

[redzone]

way to go KL.. in both the "new style" and the content... and just think you even satisfied those rhyming critiques.. lol My oh my she is a "real poet"... which all the rest of us understood and knew all along!! KL ROCKS!!! eat your hearts out fools... er.. sorry KL, got carried away... but in my defense I point to your poem as prime proof!!

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww you are so sweet. I enjoy the challenge, like pulling off wearing a colour you don't normally wear, you have to make it your own. :)

[Richard🖌]

Simply gorgeous, KL!
You've aced Mollie's form to a tee, spot-on in every way, and how heart-thrilling to the senses, too.
Though, your skills are evident and undeniable, combined with the easy flow of this form you've truly made it dance and sing across and down the page … the five forms of love have never felt so good!
Exciting presentation, too, with the perfect picture choice and title!

MMmmm, I love it, and i know if Mollie was able to read it, she would, too!
Big thanks of many happy hugs to you for making this poem glitter … blessings, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. The one thing I did have trouble with is your http address is visible on my copy and not when I press save. I shall try again to place it in a different spot.

[Richard🖌]

Oh, glad you worked it out.

[iamshadowine]

amazing this one i tell you! a very good write! keep writing :D

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I believe I wrote my first poem at 6 years old. That was a long time ago. So write I will, hopefully for at least 40 more years - or like Barabara Cartland, even longer ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your experiments in form work well...i am not that conscious of form as i read you, i simply find determination of meaning in the words themselves....the different stages of love...yes, the tangible, but then the palpable, to the love we feel in our hearts and souls...the deepest love..the one that stays, the one that really counts. Makes us feel whole...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. That is always my hope in creating these. If I cannot find a soul within the confines of the form, I won't build around it, like making something out of clay. If the form feels contrived, then it is just a mind exercise, like a crossword. I made this one mine with the last line of each.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. A marvelous definition of love and its multifaceted forms. You are ever the creative ...:)...............

[Lyn Anderson]

I try to be. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....:)))))

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....:)))))

[Allison Lyndel]

I liked how you described all your definitions of love. You explain that love is defined as something: imagined, tangible, palpable, vitreous, and forever. How you write this poem almost seems step-by-step. First one may imagine loving someone. Then, that love becomes tangible or real. After the love becomes real, it becomes palpable which is defined as clear or plain to see. This could be represented when two lovers become a couple. For it to last, the person must be vitreous and vitreous in their relationship. This means that the person shows standards and is loyal to the one they love. Your last definition explained is that love is forever. After showing virtue and being loyal to your partner, "forever," may symbolize marriage. It's almost like your telling a story within your poetry. I really enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading more of your poetry.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for the very thorough review. I think the story is important. Vague doesn't suit me. Thank you.

[Allison Lyndel]

Your welcome :) I enjoyed reading it.