Scrapbook tremblings

a collection of the ongoing journey

the words

I feel them
the words
water
at the corner
of my eyes
stinging
in my nose
swallowed
lump
at the back
of my throat
almost
from
heart
to
tongue

sure

you rolled over,
what?
you asked.
you must have
read my mind,
because
I never said it,
but I am sure
you heard.

the moment

there was
a moment
I was
standing
in a place
where I
had been
before
with a man
who loved me
who wanted me
for more
than I
had asked
him for
I said
no
when there
was no reason
not to
that was
the moment
I knew

Author's Note

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Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the way you pick one isolated observation, detailing it with imagination, & just letting it go, to stand on it's own merit, conveying a message as much as a vision. "The words" -- love the way you include every sensation from heart to tongue, then you state that very thing: "from heart to tongue." . . . "Sure" -- I get the feeling exactly, how we are sometimes telepathically connected to someone. . . . "The moment" -- this one is less clear to me & the following line feels tangled up, but meaningful nonetheless:
"I said no when there was no reason not to that was the moment I knew" . . . (thought-provoking).

[Lyn Anderson]

Imagine a woman with two places to go. one with a sure, safe thing, and another with a person she is not sure of. She chooses to say no to the sure thing, which makes her realize she is sure about the other.:)

[barleygirl]

Very interesting . . . thanks for explaining that. You have the most amazing observations about life.

[V]

This makes me think a lot. Though heartfelt pieces like this are so vulnerable to be influenced by one's own experiences and emotions that I find it hard sometimes to grasp the actual intention. There's a notion of moving on in it, it feels like being reminded of an old emotional journey in a way...Anyways, I could sense your feelings which makes it a good one. (Though I don't like the title because of former times as nearly everyone created those annoying scrapbooks, felt like creative sports back then but that's just my weird perception ^^)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. Yes, I have no prejudices against scrapbooks, and I do appreciate your review. It is an ongoing process, scrapbooking, and love.:)

[V]

You're right. You're welcome. :)

[Papaya]

I really like the last one. Saying no, for no good reason, then realizing you shouldn't have said no.
That 'a-ha' moment...

[Lyn Anderson]

Your perception of that ah-ha moment is intriguing, and not exactly as I meant it, but I do enjoy seeing it in a different light. :)

[Papaya]

Of course, I mean I always know exactly what you mean but choose to offer a different perspective.
;)

[Lyn Anderson]

it is a valid perspective. the person in this particular vignette recognized she was in love when she decided to take a path of uncertainty rather than certainty.

[Jon Roggie]

This is a bittersweet collection. Feels like deciding to go away.

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting you should see it that way. I guess my glasses were more rose than grey, but I can see it through both lenses, now that you mention it.

[Jon Roggie]

Depends on your mood. I do prefer the rose.

[Hyacinth]

This is beautiful. Really real, really wonderful. I love it. The only thing I'd say is about the punctuation, you've used it in some stanzas and not in others and I think that it would perhaps be better if you did a sort of patttern? This is just a small inconsistency though, and I love your work. I'm off to read more!

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you. I do that sometimes with punctuation. I will have a look. ah yes, I added it in the third where it should not be for consistency's sake. I am keeping it in the middle. Thank you for pointing that out.:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Funny thing is, there was no punctuation in my original of the third poem. Not sure why I added it. If I do add it back in, I would have to add it to the first ... Again, nice to hear the thoughts of others.

[Hyacinth]

No problem :) I'd want the same for me.

[Zaineb nisar]

perfect

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I am glad it spoke to you.

[Alfred Kukitz]

A round fires from a neuron of consciousness, the knees weaken, the footing that you so bravely wore finds a place where bullets keep score.

Regards,
Al

[Lyn Anderson]

Your review is a poem in and of itself. Thank you.

[Ruth]

Retrospect can speak so very loudly and catch us unaware, I like the title to this piece also...nicely enwraps the emotion within...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you -- sometimes we hit a title that fits -- I liked this one too.

[Pryde Foltz]

There is but one mine and infinite points of consciousness. When we accept and intimacy with another point consciousness ... well we begin to read each other's mind. You are not alone in this phenomena. Spooking right ... lol:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in. I appreciate it.