Perhaps, what that person doesn't realize is that love... true love.. commitment...deserve a bit of thought. Maybe, because I have lived through some ill thought out relationships and seen and felt the damage, I am too scrutinizing myself. Sometimes, that has gotten in the way, but usually not. When my heart knows, as you say, the passion will bear scrutiny. Wonderful message and love the way you put it all together on the page.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you very much. I am not sure why it irked me so much -- probably the messenger who called me M.. read moreThank you very much. I am not sure why it irked me so much -- probably the messenger who called me Machiavellian -- I am so far from that. And the scrutiny part, that was just bonus from a review. I thought it clever and strange to have my Heart Whispers Abandon poem described as "scrutinised passion" -- but if the shoe fits, wear it, and wear it with style.
8 Years Ago
Well, if that review sparked this then you succeeded in flipping it over!
Love! Love! Love! This is a great collection of perfectly connected dots. I mean, they don't go together like a puzzle, but with just enuf proximity to keep the mind wandering in one direction like a curvy stream. Your description of being analytical & contemplative is something I can really relate to. I spent the first half of my life being reactive, now I find I'm very adverse to the very things you're eschewing here in a gentle, non-judgmental way. Nice job & thanks for sharing. I can feel more of your intensity in this collection.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you. I am not one to be ruled by emotion. Thanks for understanding and remarking on this piece.. read moreThank you. I am not one to be ruled by emotion. Thanks for understanding and remarking on this piece.
while there may be a chaotic quality to love, the heart and soul of love is a "symmetrical equation" and it is through this symmetry, that love becomes a very wild and crazy affair, in other words, very passionate... nicely and passionately done KL..
I do not do this often, but I would like to make a bit of a suggestion, do you want to pause the flow by using a comma at the end of "through love"?? it mostly is just me, but I like the smoothness as you read without the comma....
in reading your poem, I was wondering how much being hurt in a previous relationship is also involved in over thinking... I think we should always understand the necessity for symmetry (the "you of you" and the "me of me"), the reality as you put it, while allowing for just plain reaction to their presence at times... it takes some real mutual respect and equality for this to happen I think... anyway, perhaps I am "over thinking" your poem KL, as it is a very good one!! thanks for sharing it...
redzone
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Most definitely over-thinking comes from both my personality and my experience. As for the through, .. read moreMost definitely over-thinking comes from both my personality and my experience. As for the through, yes, I do believe I should take out the comma.
And you call it accurately. I cannot write well without letting me show through, even if the subject.. read moreAnd you call it accurately. I cannot write well without letting me show through, even if the subject matter is not about me, it must move me. I used to hate contrived projects in school that forced a person to write on something they were not interested in. That said, I never read King Soloman's Mines, but I got A+ on the paper I b'sd my way through.
8 Years Ago
I hate to say it, but I did the same thing for a term paper. I had about 60 notecards, and turned t.. read moreI hate to say it, but I did the same thing for a term paper. I had about 60 notecards, and turned them into 8 pages of writing.
I love your style KL it's very unique. I quite enjoyed this piece of yours. Thank you very much for sharing, nicely written.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you, I am glad my "style" is appreciated -- I have always written this way, but only recently .. read moreThank you, I am glad my "style" is appreciated -- I have always written this way, but only recently in the past few years have kept the related poems together instead of taking them apart.
8 Years Ago
Of course it is, you are a wonderful writer. And that's good :)
I'm not really sure I understand what 'scrutinized passion' means or in what context he delivered this.
I'm sure it was good though. Don't we all scrutinize, analyze way overthink things when it comes to love?
No? What!? Anyhow, absolutely enjoyed this.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I didn't really know what the heck he meant either, that's why I had to analyse it! Canadian girl I .. read moreI didn't really know what the heck he meant either, that's why I had to analyse it! Canadian girl I use my Z's sometimes too. Been thinking about Gord Downie. Such a beautiful mind.
what a tempting nibble you are ...closing verse is so finely tweeked ...i am too old to be in the scope of this speaker but not so old i can not fly with fanciful dreams ... really like every word of this one girl! the honesty blossoms and bleeds at the same time .. great job! thanks for sharing!
E.
ps Symmetrical equation is so scientifically divine ..brilliant i say ..brilliant!! :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Delighted you should say so, though with me, most writing is very untweaked. Only the formatting and.. read moreDelighted you should say so, though with me, most writing is very untweaked. Only the formatting and music takes time. I was pleased with this one and inspired by a review, as so often is the case. :)
8 Years Ago
perhaps i would say it better as .....finely sparked .. subtle sexuality ... brings to mind ...well... read moreperhaps i would say it better as .....finely sparked .. subtle sexuality ... brings to mind ...well...i would so happily scrutinize your speaker with care and due diligence ... :)
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