nonchalant love

another 10 words challenge

I saw you staring
at that scrawny girl,
unnecessarily undressing her
with your eyes;
thanks to the rain,
there was little left
to the imagination  --

and eminent though
you are to me,
I doubt such a
sweet young thing
would find you tasty --
or give you so much
as a whiff of her perfume --

you may think
me reckless
with your affection,
but your minor flirtation
I take with
a generous pinch
of salt ---

puzzled at my
nonchalant air,
you wonder
if my love be true.
you never paused to think,
she was looking back at me,
not you.

Author's Note

create a poem with these ten words

N O N C H A L A N T, P U Z Z L E D, P I N C H, M I N O R, R E C K L E S S, P E R F U M E
T A S T Y, E M I N E N T, R A I N, S C R A W N Y
* there are so many reasons I chose this song

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

It is always an experience for me the way you use the video to enhance your writing. This video catapulted me back in time...my goodness.
I love to read what you write with these challenges! It is fun to see what each writer will come up with, and I have found it stretches me a bit. That first stanza is so vivid and sets the stage for the scene and the thoughts that come forth. I love the way you take the situation and turn it around. Wonderful job!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much.

[Kesha]

Ha! That is quite the twist at the end. Made me chuckle. A witty write.

[Lyn Anderson]

I have to say, this particular set of words it was hard to keep it PG.:)

[Kesha]

There is no way I would be able to keep it PG. I applaud you :)

[aLittlePain]

So beautifully crafted the imagery is quite vivid.
Those 10 words never looked so good!

I love the ending...weaving the path meant for another.

Rach

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I love the word challenges. They help me think ...

[Coyote Poetry]

A perfect ending to the poetry.
"you never paused to think,
she was looking back at me,
not you."
Sometime the temptations are for another. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in to read my challenge.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well and you are welcome my friend.

[V]

I love this stream of consciousness you provide with this one. A poetic story filled with wondering, deep thoughts and images crafted pretty clearly.

[Lyn Anderson]

I find that word and image prompts work well to inspire me, while I struggle with being inspired by forms such as sonnets etc.

[V]

I might be inspired by literally everything surrounding me but it's nice that it works for you this way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, reminds me of the episode of Person of Interest monday night with Root and Shaw and their little sizzle of passion...all the males on the show gawk at both of them...but where does the interest really lie for them?

we fool ourselves and make fools of ourselves so often when we flirt ....and naturally assume it will be reciprocated ...:)))

[Lyn Anderson]

I think it is hilarious when my man flirts, or God forbid, my dad -- I even have the best memory of my grandpa grabbing a waitress and doing the jig to show off when he was 91. Jealousy is a reflection of two things -- one's own insecurity, and one's need to possess the other. And if your jealousy lies in the roots of betrayal, well, best be done with that particular relationship.

[Wicahpi]

LoL I Love this!! Major kudos for a well laid out scenario. Gotta love that ending!
ps. I love that song, too. Thank you for entering the 10 Words I Give contest! Bravo :O

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. Actually, the hardest part I found was to not default to something really R rated -- it was tempting with this particular set of words. In fact, for fun, I just may have to create a steamy Friday night write with these words ...

[Wicahpi]

This set of words could very well play into one of those steamy scenes! Enjoy that Friday Night Write! LoL

[??????]

Ha ha lol that's a good one and must say she had great taste:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks my friend. I appreciate that. I like these word challenges to stretch my abilities.

[??????]

Your welcome:) and you are the best at that not me he he:)

[Matching Socks]

Oh man...
That is just a priceless finish.

[Lyn Anderson]

Glad you enjoyed. I liked this one. It was a struggle to keep it PG with those word choices, but I did.:)

[Matching Socks]

Lol. Yeah. Tasty and pinch...
Yup....