steal my sunshine

one of his favourite songs -- title from the song of the same name by Len

a nuclear winter
unnatural,
insidious,
and tainted,
you whispered upon me
trying to steal my light;
there was no oxygen
in the air around you
and the bomb shelter
I built
around my heart
was not strong enough
to keep your poison
from seeping in.
I wandered aimlessly,
growing ever dim
until the sun you stole,
I took back
and gave
to him.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

It's a difficult thing to get back once it's been stolen and then takes some time to shine bright and hot again.
Like this one a lot, also like the song.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, that is true, lucky for me, someone saw something in me I didn't remember was there. Thank you for stopping in and reviewing.

[Zugzwang]

I like the use of the post apocalyptic scary metaphors....it gave the poem real darkness. 'Cept at the end. I can certainly relate to the bomb shelter analogy. Nice that you have some sun in your life now.
z.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well thank you very much. I appreciate it. And yes, I come from that age when we were all afraid of the nuclear winter.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i feel you have much sun to give...glad you got it back...

love the metaphor here.

i have done this...built a bomb shelter so impenetrable...and the attack was friendly that i thwarted...

but i couldn't tell the friend from the enemy from the possible love.

[Lyn Anderson]

oh I know, it is easy enough to build that shelter and not let the right one in either. Luckily, both of us move so slowly, we caught up to each other ... Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Jon Roggie]

As long as you are feeling the healing rays. I liked this one, and this flipping song has been intruding even before I read this!

[Lyn Anderson]

Selfishly, I wrote it because they start to play this song on the radio in the summer, and it reminded me too much of my Ex, so I had to Excise it, as it were. Thanks for popping in.

[Caradoc]

Very strong ending.

-Cara

[Lyn Anderson]

So nice to see you. And thank you.