when you

relating how one feels for another to how the other may feel for them

as the warm water splashes deliciously over
my skin,
I imagine is this how
your day with me
begins ...

a little yearn
a little burn
a little wonder
a little smile ...

carefully unbutton your shirt,
scrub your hands free of dirt
keep them just a little rough
but give the nails a gentle file,

make sure you have the ring
(I gave you) on your finger,
and the cologne I bought you
last December --

all the little things
I too remember --

does your heart still race?
your feet still pace?

all the little things I do
all the little things I see in you --
does that mean
you love me too?

Author's Note

I apologize -- this poem feels to me something like I would have written when I was 18.

But I guess he brings out the 18 in me.:) Hence the retro tune.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and kind words and thoughts in the poem.
"all the little things I do
all the little things I see in you --
does that mean
you love me too?"
I like the above lines. when love is with us. Best days of our life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww thanks. I almost did not post this one. It still seems a little goofy to me, but maybe that's because love is a little goofy.

[Coyote Poetry]

Love is goofy. Make us do foolish things and you are welcome.

[highonwords]

reminiscing, yearning, nostalgic piece in amber tones - you are falling in love with him, wondering if he is falling for you too

steph

[Lyn Anderson]

yes of course, and this is an admittedly cheeZy poem.:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is a very fun and flirty piece of poetry... Makes me feel like a teenager again with a crush.

[Lyn Anderson]

That pretty much sums it up. Weirdness, no matter how old we get ...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

then you would have been a fine writer at 18---what i am seeing here is a perfect example of when love is real...it's when all the little mundane things really mean something to each other...the everyday...

i have felt a connection to this...no apologies necessary.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I just felt it a bit -- I don't know, but glad it hits some good notes.

[redzone]

and just what is wrong with being/feeling 18??? ;0)

maybe the Foreigner song gets it right.. "maybe it's the woman in you that brings out the man in me", but in this case it would be the music found in your "young poem" that brings out the man in him...

I love your poem KL, it's sweet and filled with "the little things" that show what love is... which reminds me of another retro Foreigner song "I Want To Know What Love Is".. and he should show you!!

I hope you have this KL

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

So if he cuts your dinner for you out in a restaurant, does that count? Man, I hate asking for help, but it is nice when I get it.:)

[redzone]

YES, cause you got that hand thing going on... now if he always cuts your dinner... lol... BIG Problems

[A hare off]

I like this and this is something I'm sure many in a relationship ponder from time to time. The song was a perfect choice.

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you for your review