hey Kev

self explanatory I think

whip
snap
crack
flash
crash
instant
dead
gone

all the I love you's never said.         

stop gawking and use that f'n cell phone to call 911

rewind
the
clock
if
only
5
minutes
later

over the bridge.

hey Kev

you don't mind if I call you Kev, do you?
I mean, after we have shared such an
intimate connection, I kind of feel like
I can call you anything I want, you know?
wad4 whiplash is not near as sexy as it sounds.
I usually like a man to buy me a drink
if he is going to take my back door at 70k per hour.

Reviews

[redzone]

finally, a poem I commented on already... er.. wait it is from 2016.. oh well back to reading older ones... lol

[Lyn Anderson]

Ha ha, thanks! I move em' by category, and sometimes it gets tedious scrolling through all the old ones.:)

[Shannon]

Massive ambiguity here, even knowing the story. Which is impressive, even if the story is awful!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I appreciate it.

[redzone]

agree with E, (and S. King), poems are an explanation in and of themselves, even if we do not get them... but this poem is wide open and I would say, "back door" men are mostly ignorant pigs whether in auto crashes or in sex... everyone knows that eye to eye is better in sex and in crack ups (as long as it isn't at like a 100 mph)..

sorry about your car and the pain of whiplash... yuk!! Ouch!! Hopefully Kev at least apologized for rear ending you and his insurance is paying for the damages...

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Not only did he not apologize, he tried to blame it on the weather. And I am okay as I can be, given that I just found out I have broken bones in my hand that will require surgery.

[redzone]

KL, this is terrible... will you be able to drive the bus??? wish I could do more than just (((KL))), you deserve some good fortune you know!! if it will help I can write some silly poems and leave you lots of OCD things to point out to me.. I can be your misplaced apostrophy king, or misspelld wonder... I am quite good at this you know... ;0)

[Lyn Anderson]

I await the appointment with the plastic surgeon. Bone fragments removed and such. I would assume I will be off work for some time, don't know how long ...

[Lyn Anderson]

I have been dealing with the damned thing for over a month. Was only sent for x rays because I wasn't healing properly ...

[Einstein Noodle]

ouch! i like your note! i am reading a Steven King story called "11/22/63" .. somewhere in the first half he says "Explanations are just bad poetry" ..gotta love it right ;)

tragedy without bounds .. over the bridge and gone .. your rewind 5 minutes later is intriguing i think ... a bit of a conundrum ... we can sell ourselves so short sometimes ... and unhealthy choices will have their say ... i am a sucker and most always take the "ladies" side ..so have to say that your backdoor man isn't worth a twit to the loss of your protagonists death ... ouch!

E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for stopping in, and while double meanings are definitely intended, the pic in this poem IS the back of my car.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahh! i did not see the details ... ouch again and makes your poem more personal :) close calls make us think ... totally hope you are OK ..whiplash can show up much later i am told .. you be careful young lady!! :) needing someone to call is poignant ..even if the relationship may not have had much depth to it in reality ..its what the mind wants it to be that trumps things from time to time ... sorry! here i am twittering on like and old man eh!? love and peace and joy

[Einstein Noodle]

read it again! love your biting sense of humor there girl!

[Lyn Anderson]

ah you see now. many people interpreted it as a relationship gone wrong. Well it was. Just not in the way some were thinking.:)

[Jon Roggie]

Reminds me of my brother. Her first comment was "I wasn't on the phone!". Hope you made it through healthy.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I see you understand.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

mmm yes, the back door man...out the front door in a flash...commitment is something tornadoes never quite have...they do the damage and are gone...not even caring about the aftermath...some people are much the same.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, both literal and figurative this one. The pic is my car.