I paved over the debris left from bridges I burned after you footprints in wet cement wandering a new path to another door.
Entropic vision turned inward blinded clouds my judgment love.
headlines
etched between my brows and into your forehead, stories of where we've been and where we've yet to go. trying to read between to see if there is room for you and me.
I don't know when or if I tripped slipped stumbled or fell.
but one day came a time only to your heart my secrets I tell.
Inhale deeply the scent of your skin spread your sin in my secret spaces feel me gather all of you into me
trying too hard to be less than who I am so you won't see the more inside me.
why do you sometimes turn away when I feel those baby blues land softly upon me? are you afraid of what they'll say, or what they won't?
waiting for you to find a destiny far from me, knowing in my heart that what I want cannot be.
Intimate and sensual, your words create a diary of a love affair. I especially liked:
to see if there is room
for you
and me"
Wanting something or someone unavailable...whether because of other entanglements or other problems...is excruciating. Your words are emotional and honest. I always enjoy your work. Lydi**
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9 Years Ago
And I yours and your thoughts. See how nice this place can be?
With each thought you've opened a window to show us your strength and vulnerability.
Headlines... That's the million dollar question, is there room, for you and me. Beautiful work as always.
I always seem to want something I can't have and I'm finding myself in that place even now. It would seem that with every new page I turn there is another bridge I burn and once I'm across it, I've nothing with which I can rebuild it. I think this piece definitely speaks to that which we cannot have and always want. Temptation looms in it's depths and finds in them a a chink in otherwise impenetrable armor, form which the bridge can be burned. Nicely done KL.
Love them all...but headlines is my favorite...so creative, so clever. I've missed reading your poetry.
:) Julie
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9 Years Ago
Thank you, I think that is my favourite as well. Hope you had a good holiday season and this year tr.. read moreThank you, I think that is my favourite as well. Hope you had a good holiday season and this year treats you well.
Intimate and sensual, your words create a diary of a love affair. I especially liked:
to see if there is room
for you
and me"
Wanting something or someone unavailable...whether because of other entanglements or other problems...is excruciating. Your words are emotional and honest. I always enjoy your work. Lydi**
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
And I yours and your thoughts. See how nice this place can be?
This is really Special.
The struggle to find understanding.
All these separate thoughts hanging in the air, heart, mind and soul.
Oh the wrenching , swaying, weighing and comparing of thoughts while, trying to force those separated thoughts into one Bridge of understanding.
WOW you just spoke my whole life in one poem. The struggle to understand this life.
I wish it was as easy to struggle just one love :-)
But a whole life? Wow did I feel this.
I can clearly see this was not an ordinary poem.
This one came from pure creativity.
It's a Keeper!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I am honoured by your thoughtful review. Thank you.
Another collection of thoughts although they do share a common bridge which is ultimately, the desire for closure and renewal. Even if th steps feel like regressing at times, in reality time does not wait and changes things around us even if we don't want them.
Dyslexia's nightmare ... :)
i like this style .. small bursts of creative spontaneity .. kind of a story that starts at the end goes to the beginning and back to the end .. entropy!! i love those guys .. i think i read that one over 5-6 times and will continue to think about it .. have to wonder what you were eating, drinking or ??? ..i think the overall effect of your poem is powerful, emotive and engaging .. i like the form, words and flow .. each bridge a little destiny in itself .. into the library it goes!
E.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much. I often take words from my life as a vet tech. Entropy is common in some pure b.. read moreThank you very much. I often take words from my life as a vet tech. Entropy is common in some pure bred dogs. Now doesn't that just suck the magic out of it. No embibing necessary. :)
9 Years Ago
ah! i thought you were referring to Boltzmann's :)
Brilliant. I especially like the lines; "etched between my brows; and into your forehead,; stories of where; we've been; and where; we've yet to go.; trying to read between; to see if there is room; for you; and me." I found the sadness of the closing lines ("waiting for you to find a destiny far from me,; knowing in my heart that what I want cannot be.") especially poignant.
Don't disappear again, like Frieda.
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9 Years Ago
I will try not to. But honestly, the drama in here is a lot when you have your own personal drama go.. read moreI will try not to. But honestly, the drama in here is a lot when you have your own personal drama going on.
IKWYM. But, your a valued friend and fellow writer here to so many. Frieda dropped in and was immedi.. read moreIKWYM. But, your a valued friend and fellow writer here to so many. Frieda dropped in and was immediately driven away again. In that way, they win.
Never be made to feel pusillanimous by the poisonous plagiarists' perfidy. (Alliteration -- ROTFLMBO)
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Very nice.
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I guess I'm just in an alliterative mood today! :D
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