a cynical garden

thoughts growing in my mind

Drop Dead Cynical

from the song
of the same name ...

Rocking to a tune
become the one
most avoidant
of the literary
yet literal
swoon.

That's what happens
when you promise
the moon,
and it's only
made out of
cheese.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Neville]

Talk about cynical, as far as the moon is concerned, is that a myth, ms or mrs.....Cheese my Friend... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes I was that cynical not so long ago

[Neville]

cynicism is only for cynics and disbelievers........dont'cha know... Neville

[Einstein Noodle]

sheeese Louise! the moon is not cheese ;) this is so cynical .. :))

i think i need a platform to exuberate on .. (spell check tells me its not a word) ..
what a boisterous romp! .. how much you inspire me to peek into all the corners and angles .. your poem takes this old fuddy man onto new avenues ..
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Huh, I never thought of you as an old fuddy.:) Thanks.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) plus at least 10 to post :)

[MomzillaNC]

"Made out of cheese!" Perfect.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks I appreciate it

[MomzillaNC]

yw :D

[MsJewel]

Cynical - perhaps - but as clever and creative as ever! You never cease to amaze and entertain me with these witty little gems!

:) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

Flattery will get you everywhere, thanks.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But I love cheese! especially mature! A bright and witty piece with a sober message.

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww thanks John. Send me RRs for your latest. I am behind.

[Chloe Grant]

I haven't really seen a lot of poetry about songs, but this is awesome. It makes me want to see more. I love it, it's a really cool take. Keep doing this, it's amazing!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I love this song, and it fit my mood.

[Ruth]

Ah, KL, good to have the time to visit you today my friend, a dose of reality, salt with an extra pinch, dealt with reeling perception...always a pleasure xo

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, so nice to see you.

[Pryde Foltz]

That's what happens
when you promise
the moon,
and it's only
made out of
cheese.

That is perfect … I think you have coinage there:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah I rather liked it myself thanks.

[Matching Socks]

But just think how much a mouse would love that moon.
Perspective....

You'll find the moon that's right for you.
In the meantime, tell that rat to 'shoo'...

[Lyn Anderson]

Very good thank you.

[Rene Salinas]

Funny how the emotions of a writing can evoke a song or vice versa. I'm not sure how this relates to the subject in question but it ceratinly has managed to make you write about it, which is already a from of pondering. Empty promises. Those don't help at all.

Hoping things get better.

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

I am cynical since all my experiences have made me so, hence, Drop Dead Cynical.

[Rene Salinas]

Really! Well only based in the way you write I'd say that as aspect of your sense of humour but truly ther eis nothing wron with your moral compass... Maybe I just see the good in you?

[Lyn Anderson]

I do not see healthy cynicism as a bad thing, but necessary for survival.:)