eclipse of me

some passing thoughts on things past.

you gave me
more
than anyone
before

more hate
anger
bitter
betrayal --

right at the
start
a total eclipse
of the heart

you lied
denied
I cried
died --

but you
can't turn
back
the tide

with a tea cup
full of sorry
and an ounce
of regret.

and so,
I say yes,
you gave me
more ...

that's why
I had to learn
to care
less.

Author's Note

No, I don't need you tonight, or ever

Reviews

[Diamond]

Bitterness has to be felt sometime or the other or self love cannot be induced...Process of evolution. I felt this way a number of times. Then I realized I was turning in the wrong direction. At the end everybody is fighting with the outward bitterness. A strong piece.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for reading this one. I am in such a different place as I was when I wrote many of these pieces, it is good to revisit, and realize how far I have come. It is why I resist erasing older pieces.

[Rene Salinas]

Good ol' Bonnie is one of those songs that cannot be topped in my modest and the writing well, not difficult to relate to as if you want to preserve that aspect of you that relates to the sanity of living then you cannot put at risk. In here is is clearly described, no way am I doing that again.

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, thanks. This song was popular when I was about 10. I knew the lyrics but didn't understand them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, a teacup full of sorry...just won't cut it...and those tea bags are filled with fake contrition.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much for stopping in.

[AprilRN1210]

condensed, power in each line.. I love the trailing thought that twists and turns on this journey of where you are now and thought processes behind it.. "tea cup of sorry and an ounce of regret".. I have to say those lines are my favorite.. that regret is always fleeting and not really sincere in my experiences... always been a fan of this song.. well paired ma'am... killer ending with so much truth as always... AMEN!... brilliant as always:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, I appreciate it.

[icelandicblue]

A wonderfully polarized poem KL. I really enjoyed the way you structured your words like little stabs.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, yes, that was the aim. People who scoff at free verse think it has no logic to it. Not so.:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Funny how when people treat us badly it can give us more resolve, will power and even self belief once we have a contrast against which to compare it. As always wrtitten in concise free vers.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, yes, that is for sure. I better get on over to check out your page. Thanks for all the reviews.

[NoelHC]

The gift that keeps on giving. Return to sender.
Well stated KL, I related to this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

Return to sender indeed. Oh, I work through my bitter. I used to be 3/4 bitter to 1/4 happy, now it's more like 1/8 bitter. Making progress.:)

[NoelHC]

On a review of my Autumn Colours/Warriorpoem the other day one commenter thanked me for introducing you to cowboy music, they felt it had taken away some of your dark and angry side. I doubt that was the only cause though.

[Lyn Anderson]

ha ha that is funny. I love it. I will tell you a secret, though not so secret now. I used to lock my bedroom door and croon to Skeeter Davis. I grew up with Johnny Cash and Dolly Parton and Kenny Rogers. No, what has happened, truthfully, is a reclamation of things that were in my past that hurt too much to hold on to when my life was crap. I will always love that other music, it saved me from ending up in the nuthatch, among with other coping mechanisms. Instead of wallowing I survived, and that meant burying things that made me feel too much. It was bound to happen, but I have enjoyed sharing the journey.