My mom is a mouse murderer.

for "the grossest thing" challenge in MomzillaNC's Poetry Challenge

       "My mom is a mouse murderer!" Little Z screamed dramatically. M. tried not to laugh, even as she was gagging, watching the twitching body beneath the children's book that had crushed the invader in her room. "Grab me the dustpan, the broom, a plastic bag, cleaner and a paper towel." With trepidation, she wrapped the still warm body in a bag, and disinfected the area surrounding the "accident".
     The comedy of errors that led to the mouse's demise started with the cat, who looked passively at the mouse as M. tried to get his attention and nudge him into killing the mouse. She thought the mouse might have scurried away, and pulled out the hope chest to take a peek, toppling the pile of books onto the mouse. The tiny creature was crushed like a cartoon gets crushed by a piano. Only this mouse was real, and it wasn't walking away from the incident. Of course, she had intended to dispatch the mouse, just not in quite so dramatic or grotesque a manner.
       Later, her daughter took great pride in describing her mother's forray into mouse exterminator. "It was the grossest thing," she squealed with delight, as she retold the tale that would make her mom a legend, if only in her daughter's mind.

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

Oh dear these things happen. Poor meecie.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for popping in

[Crimson_Woad]

Very short, but enjoyable ^_^

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes a flash fiction challenge

[TL Boehm]

OMG - eeeeew. Actually, I laughed. Does that make me a terrible person? My spawn have stomped more than one of mickeys country cousins. Sigh.
Great write.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I am glad you laughed, since I always think your witty writes are funny.

[NoelHC]

I hate it when I spot one of those in the house or office, it is the time of year when they start seeking cohabitation with us. This was rather humorous, maybe not for the victim, but amusing.

I noticed:
crushed like a cartoon (character) gets crushed by a piano
foray has just one r

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for the review, and yes, it was funny. And funny, I was sure forray could have one or two r's and we are both right, although my way is the old fashioned way, and also means something entirely different as well. Interesting. :)

[NoelHC]

Well, I will give you that r, looked it up, and you forrayed the hell out of that mouse, using the obsolete version. The Urban dictionary, well I ain't going there : )

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, isn't that funny? I almost died laughing.

[NoelHC]

Hey, what color is YOUR hair?? : )

[Lyn Anderson]

Black and white of course.:)

[therisa]

Thank you, for the humurous start for my day, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

I am glad it made you smile.

[Baby Ricochet]

Mom did a stand up job. Cute story KL

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, glad you popped in.

[Lydia Shutter]

A mouse murderer? Sounds like a wonderful title to me....that daughter is lucky her mom was so brave. All I could think while reading how she disinfected the area was "EWWWWWWWWWWWWwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!" :) I liked this little story. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for reading. I can't wait to see what others do with the challenge.

[Matching Socks]

Lol! I love this. The things mom's do for their kids... :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. It was pretty funny. For all but the mouse.

[MomzillaNC]

LMBO! I love this! Gave me giggle to start my morning!

[Lyn Anderson]

Good I am glad.

[Rene Salinas]

You seem involved in challenegs that's great! Not sure if this would go in my gross section as I was left with the innevitable desire of the little one to portrait her Mom as the "slayer of slayers". So the innocence and child like wonderment felt strongly.

Good luck!

Thankyou.

[Lyn Anderson]

Man do I need to catch up on reading. I will. I promise. Thank you.

[Rene Salinas]

Oh not on my account please KL . You seem busy enough with the challenges I did not know the exsisted, that gets to show I am in my oblivion planet....