heartburn

a transient passage through my mind

Legends.
Aztecs
on altars
chests open
hearts devoured
in vain
attempts to
what?

who knows?
an abstract
feeling.
an offering
to an unforgiving
deity.

when the man
who made
false promises
on an altar
of synthetic afterthoughts
eats your heart,
what satisfaction
does he get?

he thinks
he ate it all,
but he did not.
and now he
can live with
the heartburn ... 

                        knowing I saved
                        the choicest cuts
                        for someone
                        new.

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is without question one of my favourites from your catalogue to date...I think the 'abstract feeling' is what made this resonate so deeply with me...and at the same time, I can clearly see what's going on here...I can't articulate it for the life of me though, except to say that it appeals to parts of myself that I disapprove of...but I understand, trust me...love this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

I am glad you love it. I am rather partial to this one myself.

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure :)

[realmwriter]

I do not believe that we, as caught up in human nature, as we are, every truly give away every piece of our hearts. We have so much to offer of ourselves that to offer it all to one person or deity is close ourselves off to love in it's entirety. We are only as we were created to be. I love this piece. It's darkness it's singular since of hope in the last lines. What a fantastic write and right up my alley.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I take the philosophy that there are many loves that cross our lives, and that "perfect someone" is, to a certain extent, what you make it. Yes, there are mistakes along the way that turn out not to be what we thought they were, but to close our minds to the possibilities will make us unable to receive gifts that come along. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[realmwriter]

You are very welcome my friend. In my mind there is no such thing, at least on Earth, as perfection. But there can be perfection in how we perceive things: love, life, hope, joy, faith, trust, honesty. In these things can we seek to find perfection, for only in these things can perfection be had.

[AprilRN1210]

oh my goodness!! I am glad I saved this one for last!!! YES!!!! LOVE THIS... heck yes!.... the ending is hands down my favorite!!.....the realization when they see that we not only survived, but were able to thrive and shine again makes that taste of false satisfaction bitter and biting... or in this case "burn"... oh yes!!!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, yes, I love serving up the heartburn. My latest is a reflection of that.:)

[Nusquam Esse]

I like the way you tie in occult offerings, human sacrifices, to the concept of betraying the heart given at an altar. Never really thought of it like this, so this really piqued my interest. Sigh, a shame that people have to experience things like this... but perhaps it can help you appreciate it all the more when you do find someone worthy of the 'choice cuts'.

[Lyn Anderson]

Perhaps so, and thank you. It is good to take all those emotions and lay them out.

[Butch Decatoria]

Interesting. I tried avoiding imagining the heart being eaten, leaves one feeling disgusted... And I am assuming that was your point, comparing a break up to that kind of act, kinda brilliant. And you managed to give dry heaves... Lol. Great write. Kudos and thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I do think of exes as cannibals.:)

[writing mojo]

first off, i like the form and the separated ending, so many tie ins that you knot within stomach consciousnesses, feeling through absorption, osmosis perception in the plasma of having the guts for proofing hard to swallow points..great piece

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. I appreciate it.

[TL Boehm]

when the man
who made
false promises
on an altar
of synthetic afterthoughts
eats your heart,
what satisfaction
does he get?

Damn Skippy! Yup - saved the choices cuts for someone new. Love the sassiness in this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, glad you stopped in.:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Heartburn as a title threw me as you weaved another descriptive and vitriolic sketch about you ex to a down to earth conclusion.

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting new Avatar there. Yes, well, I go where the muse takes me, and she has quite the multi-personality going on at times.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That IS me driving!

[Lyn Anderson]

Now that, is sexy, my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh it was not mine I took my son to a driving experience for his birthday and joined in for a small part of it! I have picsd of me in leather jacket in the driver's seat lol!

[Lyn Anderson]

I was referring to the driving, not the car. I am no Material Girl.:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And I am not a material person. Driving it was a damp squib as it was too powerful for a novice to open up but it was a thrill!

[Rene Salinas]

What we decide to give would seem like an easy thing to figure out. But it happnes that sometimes we are met with unexpected emotions. Thanks so much at times takes you back, For what you say? It is like that that the back and forth of emotions is a treasurous path. So when it is in between people that have supposedly commited to do this for long periods of times unsuprisingly it reaches levels of intensity not disimilar to the idea of sacrficial offerings of the olden times. In here KL let's me know that when it is all said and done she did not sacrifice that part of her that would have been too much to be offered instead she kept it hoping that someone who is able to see them for what they really are could come around eventually.

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

For a long time, I thought I had lost. Now I know I haven't. Thank you for your ever thoughtful reviews.