emotional irrationality

another collection from paper to netbook

dress rehearsal --

I handed him over
with grace and dignity
I didn't put up a fuss --
it was a dress rehearsal
for us.

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later

After all this time
I still don't know
I just think
I just feel ...

then again
everyone who ever
said the words
lied.

so maybe no words
are better
than ones later
denied.

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take a leap, and fly when you can

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the novelty wheres off quickly

when not knowing
where we'll be
makes it difficult to lie
next to you
the novelty wheres off quickly,
just don't pretend
I understand.

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you gave me
all you could
don't feel bad
but if that's all
there is
do me one more
favour,
set me free.

Author's Note

yes the misuse of wheres is intentional

Reviews

[Steve L.]

Whoa...The quintessential modern relationship...a very tangled web we all have be in at some point...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate it.

[Matching Socks]

Big finish... So true. Although there have been times when I've been set free and just keep hanging on like a silly dummy.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, I suppose that is true. I had left it "undone" but switched the order around for a more aesthetically appealing piece.

[NoelHC]

You know I love these "strung together" rambles into your thoughts, each standing on their own, and coming together in a "United we stand" larger work. The "where" stuck out for me, but then I considered the source, and looked deeper into it. I saw what you did there.
Well written.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, I know. I knew it would stump some people, but I wanted it that way, for specific reasons. I do need to go back and compile my work into cohesive units to make them easier to go through. I just keep writing new ones and reading and reviewing, so organizing keeps getting pushed to the back.

[NoelHC]

That selection of music took me for a trip in the w-a-a-a-a-a-a-y back machine BTW! That was a big hit when I was a kid.

[Lyn Anderson]

I found that music when I watched "True Romance" -- one of my most favourite Tarantino screenplays. He had a knack right from the beginning of pairing eclectic music and casts to make a cohesive work.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is real music. I miss the old song.
"you gave me
all you could
don't feel bad
but if that's all
there is
do me one more
favour,
set me free."
I like the ending. Sometime people have nothing left. Better to find new places to rest. Thank you for the amazing poetry and song.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I changed that poem to the end on the prompting of another writer. I wanted to leave it unfinished, but it does work better this way.:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A good ending. You closed the door.

[Rene Salinas]

This brough back memories of the times when I was semi - forced to do my classical guitar exams. The semi - forced relates to the italian background of my mother's side which means I had no choice on the matter "Here do this" it went. The guitar teacher for years came to torture me. Nope, your hand should be this way. Nope, that doesn't sound good read it properly! One day he comes with a written piece and say you need to drop all the formality to play this! It is expected you study 3 Hours a day minimum. Is not about what is written he kept on saying is the colour the texture the nuance in the music he added.Try not tto think it too much he ended.
I read some of the reviews and it is funny how formality dictates our views. This type of writing for me is an encapsulation of sorts and it should not be contricted by the forms and rules of traditional thinking. As KL opens up and let's us navigate thorugh her inner world lets behold and see how we do through the textures, through the colours through the nuance.......

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. Here's the thing. Emotionally, I like the pieces where I put them in the first place. However, thematically, it is better as I modified it. I can see both sides of the fence. It's a quality that frustrates some people. Am I this or am I that? I am neither, I am both. And with that stream of consciousness stemming from your review, I am off ...

[Pryde Foltz]

the novelty wheres off quickly

when not knowing
where we'll be
makes it difficult to lie
next to you
the novelty wheres off quickly,
just don't pretend
I understand.

It's that trying to find meaning in all that is fleeting. You know I love this form from you:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, glad you got the where.:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

I hate getting to a review late, but I can't help but concur with Hitchhiker below...on all points. beautiful affect with the position of the stanzas...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks a lot. Now, as to the wheres, it is on purpose because it is the where in question. I don't understand the comment about moving the stanzas.

[Bright Ocean Star]

I got the where's and I thought "How Clever!" It took me reading the lines beneath, though.. you are a clever woman, Kitten Lover! I mis-typed stanzas...I should have said the change of position of the parts of the poems... The position of the pieces starts on the left, the middle part shifts to the right, and the poem ends in the middle. It is a visual flow that forced your eye to follow. I liked the effect. :)

[Hitchhiker]

I am glad you cleared up the "wheres" for us. It stood like like acne on a fourteen-year-old girls face. I appreciate how you formatted this piece. Movement gave it a grace that mere words could not in my opinion. Another opinion, I think the next to last stanza should be the last instead of next to last.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for your review. In clarification, are you saying to move the last "poetry snippet" up and the second last down? I don't think of each piece as a stanza, so I was a bit confused.

[Hitchhiker]

Sorry I confused you. I just thought this stanza should be the last one.

you gave meread moreSorry I confused you. I just thought this stanza should be the last one.

you gave me
all you could
don't feel bad
but if that's all
there is
do me one more
favour,
set me free.

Just switch the last two stanza.

[Hitchhiker]

you gave me
all you could
don't feel bad
but if that's all
there is
do me one more
favour,
set me free.

This is the stanza I wanted to be the last. Sorry, I keep doing something wrong here. Hope this post okay.

[Lyn Anderson]

I get it, yes, I actually thought of that, and will contemplate it. There are personal reasons I left it "undone" -- but thematically, I agree, wholeheartedly.

[Hitchhiker]

Thank you for contemplating it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

More interesting tit bits that make the reader contemplate and feel the emotion in them.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate it.

[kublakhan27]

You have great instincts when it comes to stringing small bits together and presenting them as a cohesive train of though...a lot of great observations in this one...a thinker for sure, great work...

Btw, it should be the novelty 'wears' off quickly ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

The wheres is on purpose. Because of the where being in question. I did put it at the top of my notes.

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh, and pardon me, thanks for the review.:)

[kublakhan27]

Oh, sorry about that...I'm usually keen to those things but I've been kind of a mess these days...always a pleasure :)