random sketches in my head

random sketches in my head

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
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another collection

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past due

a dream

mountains of papers
stacked to the ceiling
hoarding bills
and promises
past due
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the aftertaste

i ate my pain
for so long
i forgot what it
was like to live
without the
bitter
taste
of
you.


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       puddles

she stares at the urine
puddled on the floor
she tries to wipe it up,
but it doesn't hide so well
the stains linger in the cracks
along with the smell.
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i see cloudbusting


i forgot more
people
places
things
that i loved
even the good times
with you,
trying to bury
your
mean.


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© 2017 Lyn Anderson


Author's Note

Lyn Anderson
I picked this song because I loved it forever until I blanked things out
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I Loved the second and the first one caught my imagination too.
Well done.
Thank you for sharing

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Thanks for popping in
I liked the four poem. The second poem was my favorite. I like short poetry. We can catch the modest reader and hold them for a second. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

It seems a resounding consensus the second is a favourite. I think Rene is right though, in this way.. read more
Coyote Poetry

10 Years Ago

We teach each other. Renee gave me a few lines yesterdays. We need to read to make our writing bette.. read more
Your creativity is endless. A great collection of small poems....:).......

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate it.
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)......
This is a really strong collection of poems. I was particularly struck by Aftertaste. I like this grouping it creates a very edgy mood.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Thanks very much.
KL, sometimes I can't sleep at night thinking about the horrors of pain we do to each other. How the suffering and abuse is so aimed at women by those that are or claim to be their lovers or loved ones. And how this is so unnecessary.. your poem, so filled with this pain, and burried anger,, it's hard to describe the feelings you invoke...

Each of these "sketches" could stand alone and be powerful, thought provoking, wonderful, but together spaced as they are incite even more. The Kate Bush song was a surprise for me until I read the line above "I loved it forever until I blanked things out"... in this sense these are hardly "random"... loved this piece
~~redzone

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Thanks. I don't know when it occured to me, perhaps a few weeks ago, that I have literally avoided t.. read more
redzone

10 Years Ago

It was 15 years before I could listen to any song from Carol King's Tapestry album. But it was guilt.. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Wow, thank you so much. That means a lot.
Interesting little tit bits. There is a 'w' missing from 'was' in aftertaste.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Yes thanks I appreciate that and I would never have seen it as I read the W in
First of all, I like the small bursts of sketches that you joined together to make this one. It was liked playing with pieces of a puzzle, and I love puzzles. In the Aftertaste, I think you meant "I forgot what it is like to live"...but instead of 'is' you put 'as'...just a minor typo. Spellcheck wouldn't have caught it. I loved the music and the video you paired with this one. I thought it was brilliant to use the puddle of urine as a visual description of the disgusting nature of that relationship, because often odors/smells stay with us in our memory banks the longest. Great write, KLG! Beautiful combination!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Thanks for picking that up, hard to catch those ones. Thanks. It's the way I think. In sequential st.. read more
It is amazing to see the effect that poeple can have upon us. It doesn't matter how strong you think you are , in a relationship no one gets out unharmed. Love is cruel that way. I have confessed many times that abstractions is my favorite way to communicate. I like connecting the dots so to speak although sometimes I get it completely wrong. The puddles was such a strong image, the stains and the smell, stench even in some cases. It is time to reduce everything to ashes and turn a new leaf.

Thankyou

Posted 10 Years Ago


Rene Salinas

10 Years Ago

Well I think that practice might eventually lead to a style KL refinement and what not even when the.. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

This is, in fact, a reversion to my initial style of writing. I always wrote this way, and then diss.. read more
Rene Salinas

10 Years Ago

Oh KL arm yourself with patience one day some wine and do the book with chapters I promise I will re.. read more

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Added on September 29, 2014
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