weeps a willow

From Momzilla's Gaia Swoons challenge contains the line "and the forest primeval weeps"

I dreamed a dream,
a frosted dream,
that summer
never came,

wept a willow,
on child's pillow,
wondering what
will happen,
tomorrows,
and tomorrows,
sorrows that
never end,

winter's sleep
a lifetime keep,
and the forest
primeval weeps.    

Author's Note

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

This is amazing! Such beauty in despair! The discrete repetition and rhyming added personality and emotional impact. Thank you for sharing.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I love the challenges

[Briana O'Connor]

me too :D....

[MomzillaNC]

Oh! Just wonderful! Especially like the lines:
"wondering what
will happen,
tomorrows,
and tomorrows,
sorrows that
never end,"

Those are the lines that convict we incompetent stewards of this earth.

Be sure to post it to the group page, please.

[Lyn Anderson]

Okay, I will. Thanks it has been fun.

[MomzillaNC]

The brick challenge is giving me fits! I just can't pen something I'm satisfied with. I posted something, but I'm not happy with it.

[MomzillaNC]

Oh, the color challenge was a lot of fun too. Are you going to give us a challenge?

[willweb]

This poem was so soft KLGoode. A nice feathery feel to it as I read. It seems there is no end to your talent. I realy enjoyed this today.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, that is a beautiful thing to say.

[Frieda P]

Another dreamy one from your pen, are you going soft on us or what? :)

[Lyn Anderson]

It's Momzilla, she sets the challenges, I just do em.

[Frieda P]

So what are you trying to say exactly? haha

[MomzillaNC]

Frieda, are you going to post your answers to the challenges on the group page?

[Frieda P]

What are you talking about?............

[MomzillaNC]

You are in my group, Poetry Challenge. There have been several challenges issued. When you complete your answers to the challenges, I hope, after you post them to your profile, that you'll post them to the group page as well.

[MomzillaNC]

And, I hope you will issue challenges of your own.

[Frieda P]

I am, where have I been?.....I don't think I've ever been on the group page since I've been here, which is going on two years now....

[MomzillaNC]

Well, the group is brand new. I've been on here less than two months and the group has only existed a couple of weeks. I thought you'd joined it. If you didn't, I KNOW I sent an invite to you.

[Frieda P]

You may have, I don't usually join groups, so I never check to be honest.

[MomzillaNC]

Oh. Well, shall I send another invite?

[Frieda P]

I found it, but it won't let me join...I'm getting a complex now ;)

[MomzillaNC]

You don't have a new invite from me? I just sent it.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love you Frieda.:)

[Frieda P]

I'm just leaving work now I'll check it out when I get home....

[MomzillaNC]

Okay. Let me know.

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks, can I have a squishy too? :) MWAH! Ciao, gotta run....

[Tate Morgan]

this set of lines sets apart from the rest I like it when you save the best for last

[Lyn Anderson]

The last lines are from the contest from Momzilla -- I needed to put them where they offered the best bang for the buck

[MomzillaNC]

Not a contest… we're not in competition with each other. It's a challenge to stretch your poetic muscles.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sorry, I misspoke, I meant challenge