The colour of you

this is for the colour challenge in the poetry challenge.

When I close my eyes

I see it,
the fields
in summer,
and the flecks
in your eyes
an ocean
of you --

the colour I
wore, that
very first time
locked in
your kiss,
swept by
your bliss --

to me,
it will always be,
forever 
meadow,
lush and dew --
the colour
of you.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Carthage Thorne| The Wi..]

This is a very lovely poem, interesting narrow structure but well written so that it isn't a stumbler in either flow or pulse. The song was pretty, and matches the theme of this poem rather nicely. Overall, the bouquet of imagery you have painted gives off a nice aroma, not super sweet to wish to gag but sweet enough to sigh with pleasant content and feel happiness towards the couple.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. This was written for a poetry challenge on colour, and I like it when something is asked of me that flows naturally. Very nice review

[Onlyme]

Wholesome heartfelt love and sheer heavenly bliss between a couple so mesmerised by each other.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well thanks. I do believe my partner will be delighted at the description of anything I write as wholesome. :)

[Neville]

Damn near made me cry... made me remember and lose myself in those olive flecks in my fathers once hazel eyes...and for that, I thank you......... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I think this particular subject brings out the best of me, and I hope, will continue to do so for a long time ...

[Neville]

me too..........

[Delmar Cooper]

Good poem, nice simple and sensible rhyme, attentive to the theme of the contest. I hope you won the all expense paid trip or at least the convertible sports car. If not? You wuz robbed!

[Lyn Anderson]

lol. This is some sap for my Farm boy. he's prize enough

[Delmar Cooper]

My color (UK translation: colour) is plaid.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Romantic, evocative and with the sultry sensuality of unsullied, simple love.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you -- though most love is never simple:)

[Bacchus]

ok- cyndi lauper- awesome...
and that was after the poem.
the flecks in the eyes got my
brain spiraling about flecked eggs..
and their beauty... funny how life
is in the eyes and the egg- really.
never fails- hit your page- and i'm out of
my writers block funk.
Thanks KL. -Bacchus

[Lyn Anderson]

You are very welcome. Awesome to be of service.

[Bacchus]

Ok- just wrote Freely Be... at least it's the beginning of the thaw.

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured KL. Love the intricate and unforgettable detail those memories bring when thought of, in more than thought.

[Lyn Anderson]

You are too kind. Sometimes a contest or a prompt can be the best of inspirations.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"to me,
it will always be,
forever
meadow,
lush and dew --
the colour
of you."

...beautifully crafted lines throughout, Kara!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for reading and reviewing one of my favourites.

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhh my ... makes me want to fall in love once again :) sighhh! very well constructed and you have pasteled my minds eye without mentioning but one color!!! the color of you :)))
nicely done ..a beautiful and softly emotive read for me
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I think it's nice like that, so you can think of your own true love, rather than describing directly.:)

[aLittlePain]

So silky smooth and elegantly expressed. I love this softer side of you, you're beautiful in this! And the song choice, just perfect. R xo

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much.