and I've bled

a little thing that just visited

                                d
                                e
                                b
                               m
                               i
                              l
                             c

I've melted,                                               
                             s
                               l
                                i
                                 p
                                   p
                                    e
                                     d
                tripped
                gripped
                and I've bled ---

I felt the ache
and felt you
take it away --

I heard every
breath and moan
you ever said;

why can't I utter
the three words
dancing in my head?

Author's Note

captcha cohelper? weird. Sorry, had trouble with format had to edit

Reviews

[Delmar Cooper]

debmilc? .dnim reven ,hO

[Lyn Anderson]

You are a clever smart a*s.:)

[micky]

Beautiful piece I truly enjoyed it :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting piece that begs the question about those words in your head?

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I must have fixed the format twenty times, the Cafe' program keeps mucking with it. It's CLIMBED, and it's up, and hopefully it stays that way!:)

[Madalyn Beck]

There is a time for everything. Perhaps it is just not time yet. Beautiful write and easy to relate to! xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I just had to write it. Might be easier to just point to the Cafe' ...

[NoelHC]

The fear uncertainty and doubt still a major theme I see from this. I am uncertain how to read the " d e m i l" that forms the first lines of this, and after "Ive melted" there is a loose "c" hanging in space.
Interesting poem KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

I fixed it. As I said, the silly Cafe' program mucked it up and it took me a while to figure it out.:)

[Lyn Anderson]

And what about the song? You proud of me, cowboy?

[Frieda P]

Are you still holding that one in, quite like this and the format, except I can't figure out the beginning, slow on the uptake today, must need more cuppas or something.

d
e
m
i
l ?

[Lyn Anderson]

I just fixed it, sorry, it looked perfect before the Cafe' program did its thing :)

[Lyn Anderson]

and yup, hasn't gotten away from me yet :)

[Frieda P]

Ha you've only further confuzzeled my head, I still like it, the cafe will drive us all insane yet! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

It's CLIMBED. It finally worked, without breaks, and without losing letters. I was literally yelling at my netbook every time I fixed it, checked it, and looked and realized it still wasn't right ...

[Frieda P]

It's a*s backwards, is that what you wanted? hah

[Lyn Anderson]

I wanted climbed, going up, from melted, which is what it is now, I believe. If I put it down it would be descended.:)

[Frieda P]

True, just checking, it works perfectly now, what perseverance, you should get a badge. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I already smoked my F9 and F10 keys in frustration one day. I glued them back, they look purty but they don't work right lol.

[Frieda P]

Ha who knew poetry could be so flipping aggravating. haha