rushing headlong into you

just a passing glance

I can pretend
I wrote a rough draft,
and edited and re-edited,
planned it,
pretty as you please.

I can say
I knew exactly what
would happen
when I came to you
on my knees ...

but, like a poem,
it entered me,
in one dream-like
headlong rush --

I had no time to
think it over,
it pushed through me
in a powerful gush -

The words I use
are irrelevant;
even a blind man could see,
just how much
you mean to me.


 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jon Roggie]

Nice. Missed this one. Lost it in the shuffle. ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

A man of few words, like someone I know. Thank you.:)

[redzone]

can't believe I didn't see this poem before this... leaves me breathless KL and yes words are importantant, but it is always what we do that shows our words to be true or false... that you rushed head long says and means more than how things were "organized"...

Good choice with that Eurythmics' song.. the feel of your poem is "a miracle of love"... ;0) I was also thinking of that Dave Matthews' song "Crash Into You"...

one thing I also think is true is that I believe your words would also be your actions that any blind man could see...

redzone

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. This is one of my favourites of the last few years.

[ReedWrite]

This is amazing.
I love it from start to finish.
The emotion and flow and how it reaches inside and touches something deep in all of us.
I love this stanza:
but, like a poem,
it entered me,
in one dream-like
headlong rush

Just perfect. Nicely done.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for the visit and the review. I am hoping to catch up on the Cafe' this week.

[aLittlePain]

Wow, this is a second, third and fourth glance KL. Last two stanzas actually pushed through me. Love this. Great song :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much.

[Papaya]

That last verse sums it up perfectly I think.
We can say, or not say the words but our actions will always betray our emotions.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I really liked this one and am happy to revisit it. I am working off phone as I am having a spot of computer trouble. I am about 30 poems behind in posting and gosh knows how far behind in reviews.:)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for sharing this KL .. its mahvelous .. simply mahvous! ..
"it pushed through me" such a powerful line for me .. read your poem twice .. going to read it again now .. its such a treat!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow. I am so pleased people are liking this one.

[Kenneth The Poet]

So rhythmic, so Eurythmic in fact...it's a sweet dream made of these and who am I to disagree.

You have a masterful pen.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. To tell you the truth I am surprised this piece is so well received. I didn't have much faith in it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Farm boy has it! So sweet and so determined and so certain!

[Lyn Anderson]

You are so funny. Thanks I think ...:)

[Frieda P]

I adore this, the pure release of poetry and affection, blissful KL! My favorite of yours thus far, I'm sure there'll be more. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow, thanks so much. It really just poured out, and I am glad it turned out how it did.

[Frieda P]

Those are always the best, as your poetry depicts! :)

[MomzillaNC]

I really enjoyed this poem. Great driving meter and rhyme that never interferes with the theme.

[Lyn Anderson]

I once was told I have neither metre nor rhyme nor good timing. I am pleased this one is hitting the mark for it is not contrived but freely given.

[MomzillaNC]

As I just told someone else, ultimately, we're our own most tyrannical censors. It does seem some of my own best work flows from spontaneity.