too bad for you

just a thought or two

I want to put my anger at you away.
No, actually,
I would prefer
to not feel it at all.
Or, at least,
stop thinking about it.

But I can't do
either of those things,
because you keep
picking at my scabs,
opening up old wounds
just to see if they are infected,
watching the blood and pus
ooze from my heart.

It wasn't enough
you took my trust from me,
you won't be happy
until I am twisted and bent,
humiliated and spent.

too bad for you,
you will never be happy
again.

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Sadly there are many who exist only to make others as unhappy as them...you got it right in the end, those people may think they will achieve satisfaction for themselves if they hurt enough, but it will never happen...we still have a much better chance at happiness than they do...turning the other cheek was never my strong suit, but it sure feels good when you can do it and deny that person the satisfaction of knowing they got to you...well done, very relateable.

[Lyn Anderson]

I appreciate it. It's funny, how sometimes something you put something up thinking "this is just my lame-o attempt to express my frustration at something, strikes a chord with people. I guess, when in doubt, put it up anyway, and see what transpires.

[Coyote Poetry]

"It wasn't enough
you took my trust from me,
you won't be happy
until I am twisted and bent,
humiliated and spent."
Some people take and take. Then want more. These folks are never content. I like the above lines and ending. I could feel the emotion and need need for separation and peace. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much for your extended visit.

[Madalyn Beck]

Perhaps he will not be happy again because you have no more scabs for him to peel off and fester the wounds? Powerful write, KL. Stay strong! xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. Someday, in the meantime, I stay strong. :)

[AprilRN1210]

I can appreciate the vivid imagery in this one... ewwwwww.. course I am use to the most extreme of these examples in the ER but wheew, it sure drives that point home... you are one of my favorite writers, your ability to say so much with so little is affecting and inspiring.. I hadn't ever heard this song, but I liked it... oh yes... and yep.. miserable people that do this to others, will never be happy... well done!

[Lyn Anderson]

This band writes heart ache like no other. Thanks so much for your amazing review. I appreciate it.

[AprilRN1210]

always a pleasure with your works..

[Lyn Anderson]

And yes, as a nurse, I can see why you would take the imagery to the extreme. I do too, because of working in veterinary medicine, so it makes it "double icky"

[AprilRN1210]

exactly... lol
way to take me there... :P

[Rene Salinas]

I thought I would adhere to the intentions in this writing by contribuiting with adjectives and so on ammunition of sorts as to my suprise I felt KL holding back so here is to the impulse:
Intenacious while intersecting, revel in reaving fats from corporal griskin, Your anima culled ,Your impact exsiccated , left to bathe in sere glutanete brewed while your remains awashed by frivolous solvent abuse. All that is left - ..A truculent shambles so severe...

Always willing me

Thankyou

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, this is me, trying to seethe less.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The duel continues in fluid vitriol that is as acid on the page. First stanza two many tos in this line:
'to not to feel it at all'

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for pointing that out. No one else did:)

[Austin Fern]

I would recommend revising the first stanza a bit. Putting a feeling away, or not feeling, or burying is pretty much just repeating the same thing and is a bit off putting. I enjoy the rest of the poem, but that first stanza is going to turn a lot of people away.

The poem itself is very relatable as almost everyone has, or will have, someone like that in their life. It flows rather well and I don't notice anything overtly wrong beyond the first stanza.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I shall take a look. It is repetitious by its nature.

[Austin Fern]

Repetition is fine, being redundant is not. But, ultimately, it is entirely up to you as this is your piece.

[Lyn Anderson]

I did alter it, not entirely sure about it. May require some sleep.

[Austin Fern]

I think it is much better now, less redundant.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for your input. I mostly go straight from thought to post and rarely edit unless I think it over.

[Sami Khalil]

"opening up old wounds
just to see if they are infected,
and watch the blood and pus
ooze from my heart."

Some ex's delight in the misery and suffering of the lost partner. A revenge type of action. A wickedness in their heart. Excellent...:)..............

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for stopping in and taking the time.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......