a plate of apathy

something I just thought of

he prepared me
a plate of
apathy,
dressed as love.

it was garnished with
all the
accoutrements
a girl could want:

lies
treachery
insults
anger
lechery
sloth
jealousy

for dessert he
served me
selfish,
with a cherry on top.

No wonder
I vomited
it all back up
on his shoe.

Author's Note

ha ha ha I had to do it. This has been modified slightly in keeping with the foodie theme, thanks Delmar, it's different than what I said, different that what you suggested, and better, I think than both of us thought.

Reviews

[Blake Fodor]

Very personal, emotional write with good components of poetry and a command of language.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Now girl time to move on and rejoice. But the vitriol in this is wonderful and the shockwaves as I know are the aftershocks.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, well the bitter is better sometimes.:)

[Madalyn Beck]

Bahaha! Oh, this was good. I love this one, KL! The word use here and the imagery - fantastic! This made my day. Going into my favs. Thank you, dear! xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Awesome. As I tell everyone, Delmar set me straight on the path to a perfect foodie metaphor.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice ending to the poem. I like the way you used the words. Made the ending perfect. No weakness in the outstanding and fun poem to read.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I owe the perfect foodie metaphor to Delmar, who pointed out how this poem could be better.

[Pryde Foltz]

Damn, I wish I was a cat … I save up all my hairballs for one special guy. A really fantastic write, here, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. I did enjoy writing this one.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love the foodie theme....the metaphor is wonderful! Selfish with a cherry on top....love it! So clever. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks Lydi - the foodie theme throughout is thanks to Delmar Cooper, I had a couple of other words in there, mixing metaphors and such, and he set me straight to a better poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

It's great when friends can help!

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, that is my favourite part of the cafe', and what I think it should be for.

[Lydia Shutter]

I agree! Have a great evening.

[willweb]

Well at least you got a cherry out of the deal. Fiesty KLGoode and can I say that this was KL good? I've wanted to say that since I met you. I enjoyed this one today, even if it did make my stomach queasy.

[Lyn Anderson]

That's funny, thanks, and I did like this one myself, especially after Delmar Cooper helped me out with a few things. I highly recommend his stuff.

[J. K. Beach]

Well I certainly hope he finally took notice when he found himself wearing a soggy shoe. Awful to have made such a lovely gesture and have him just walk away... Very nicely done!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate the review.

[Rita L. Sev]

Nothing worse than sugar-coated apathy; yes, it is quite sickening... Great stuff here, KL.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, I appreciate that.