choking on dry ice

inspired by Ance's Pretty Little Hate Machine

Standing in line
in the cold --
under dressed
for the weather
over dressed for
the night --
ushered in
the music pounds
everyone is looking
for the one they
might
take home --
bodies bump and grind
on the sticky floor.

I spend my time
looking oh so cool
with a cigarette in hand
trying to stand
on torturous spikes,
pulling my skirt down,
hoping to find you,
choking on dry ice.

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Brings me back to another time in my life.....FM heels and tight dresses with a cocktail in one hand and a ciggy in the other. Those were the days....but were they really that good? I don't think so. You set the scene so well and brought us to it. Good one, Lyn. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

No, they weren't that good at all. It's funny how some people remember their youth as something they'd rather return to. Maybe the innocence of eight, maybe the body of 18, but I'll take today over 28, and that's the truth

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the honest words and thoughts. You painted a realistic place with your thoughts. Thank you Lyn for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. Thought I'd feature the oldies, now that I have the monumental task of putting all the poems into 50 books ...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Would be interesting books and you are welcome Lyn.

[Lyn Anderson]

They're all up. Pick a book and have at er, though you've read many already

[Paul Bell]

Love that mini skirt going micro. And did you pull.

[Lyn Anderson]

You gotta have the wiggle, pull, look bored thing down.

[Neville]

Now this takes me way back to a time when I used to smoke & do all those things, except for pulling my skirt down. Some things one just has to do in private, or maybe not. A very atmospheric write with just the right amount of smut.......

[Lyn Anderson]

But you were there, watching me wiggle down that skirt.:)

[aLittlePain]

That's some kick a*s poetry! Dirty and slick, I love it x

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks hon. Glad this little ditty is getting noticed again.

[Ted Kniffen]

Back in the day it was an Ottawa band named Canada Goose playing Higher and Higher in a smoke filled bar.
Thanks for the memory.

[Lyn Anderson]

You are welcome. (Thanks for popping in)

[Papaya]

How come I never read this? :)
Weird. I love it!

[Lyn Anderson]

I dunno. I noticed your stuff before you noticed mine. :)

[Papaya]

Lol. Maybe??
I don't know. I'm here now though!

[Baby Ricochet]

Sounds like a real dive. Good imagery kl

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh I loved my old dives, it was fun while it lasted ...

[Madalyn Beck]

The imagery here is astounding. The last lines packed the punch. Great write! xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, Ance and I are close to the same age, haunted the same bars at the same time, so it's no wonder why her writes inspire me to flashback.:)