eyeliner on bar napkins

inspired by the old days I find myself writing down poetry in a bar ...

pressing against the dark

slivers of light
press against
my mind of dark
as I push against
your body and feel
your tug and sway --
the warm trickles
in no matter how
we try to keep it at bay
tell me you want me to stay
let it in baby,
at least for today .

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                           (an almost) past senryu

the past knocks loudly
demanding an audience
first refusal right
                             is mine.

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Unintentional cruelty cuts deeper than intended
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the dress
Wouldn't you like to know
what I did with that dress?
something like what you did
to our vows.
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- poor dude ...

all these years later
poor dude
with the curly blonde
metal god wanna be hair --
I wouldn't have given you
a second glance in 1982 --
what makes you think
all these years later
that's something
I would suddenly
be into?

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

A grouping of poems that float together in a place where they are taken out like photos, ruminated about, and then put away. They occupy the same pages though and it can't help but make the reader wonder along with the writers what if...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you, I appreciate it.

[priya]

Extremely beautiful poem..nicely woven and beautiful pattern i see here... Excellent. :))

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you for saying so.

[MomzillaNC]

I once scrawled a poem across a bathroom mirror in pencil eye liner after a shower in the communal showers in the dorm. I ran back to my room to grab paper and pen, but when I came back, housekeeping had arrived and already wiped away most of it. I never could capture that poem again. Sigh. Wish I'd had a bar napkin handy!

The layout of this one is like a roadmap.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. This is the way I started out. Snippets on one paper, in different styles and positions, then I would take them home, and break them into their component parts. Now I sometimes leave them together like this.

[MomzillaNC]

It was a good call on this one.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I am learning as I go. Weirdly, I broke them up always until coming to the cafe'. I posted one like this and it was well received. So now, if the parts seem to fit, I keep them together.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :D

[Skai Rain]

This is moving and the setup is PERFECT. Thank you so much for sharing!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I appreciate it. I do like these poem vignettes. I write them from time to time.

[Frieda P]

Is this before or after vodka? I like the first one the best, and the title is killer, you must have been bored back then, eh?

[Lyn Anderson]

No not bored, inspired in a crowd

[Frieda P]

I've never been inspired to write in a bar, I must be going to the wrong joints. ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

No, maybe not smoking the right ones ... lol

[Frieda P]

I have no clue what the fook you're tawkin bout Willis ;)

[An owl on the moon]

Reflective and moving, your inspiration was allowed to flow, as it should, in any and every situation. Powerful.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, nice to meet you.

[Madalyn Beck]

This is perfect. I felt the movement from these different sections. They had a sense of unity to them and really, it pulled me in. I adore the way you have this. You should write like this more often. It is quite intriguing!! xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much for your review.

[NoelHC]

I like what you have done here, the different style, the different font, but one unifying theme. Powerful writing.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. This is the way I started out writing, on paper, napkins, etc. spread on one or two pages.

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, the past is part of who we are now and it will continue knocking till we pay attention to it.....of course, you DO have the right of first refusal and just because you hear it knocking does not mean you need to let it in! "Pressing against the dark" is such a very sensual write....the urgency of desire is palpable. I loved all of these! Keep writing on bar napkins with eye liner....because the emotions are so real. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much, Lydi. Yes, there is something very real about writing like this ...

[Pryde Foltz]

(an almost) past senryu

the past knocks loudly
demanding an audience
first refusal right
is mine.

Loved this whole piece. Work of literary art, but loved the 'almost' senryu, although I would take off the title … the segment is superb and needs no explaining. Reads and sits beautifully. Gorgeous, gorgeous.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you. I will think on title. Hard to write from phone. Keeps freezing up.