on the take

I really just wanted to be nice ...

today is your birthday
and
I really just stopped in
to say hello
I only popped by
to let you know
someone is thinking of you
who doesn't
need you to fix a car,
a ride home from the bar,
a fence to mend,
a package to send ...
I wanted your day to be pleasant,
I brought you a present,
but I couldn't resist,
when you gave me that kiss,
and became another on the take.
but at least, I left you a cake ...

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hmmm you left him cake you say lol.

[Lyn Anderson]

Vidya, you are a quick woman, and I love you for it. You know how many people, before Frieda pointed it out, thought this was just a happy greeting card with no twist?

[Vidya Bacchus]

Puhleese when do your poems not have a twist? And I love you for that .We must be cut from the same cloth :P

[Lyn Anderson]

Yep, I got the "oh, this is a nice little greeting card reviews" -- it made me smile ...

[Delmar Cooper]

All this poetry AND she bakes. Whatta woman!

[Lyn Anderson]

ha ha -- I am superwoman hear me ROAR!lol.

[MsJewel]

You are so creative and clever. Love this one!
Another one for my library!

:) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, Ms. Jewel, always delighted.:)

[John Anderson]

Beautifully expressed and nicely penned

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much for your reviews.

[Stephen]

Perfect ... *Wink* Here your fragile heart speaks ~~ up to its beats!

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. Yes, my fragile heart ...:)

[Madalyn Beck]

Oh, yes. Haha! At least you left a cake indeed! Clever write. You had me going there at the beginning. xo :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thankfully, you are following more than the greeting card surface ...:)

[Ruth]

Always more than meets the eye - yes, a lovely sentiment but with an intelligent moral...at least you did leave a cake ;) Awesome x

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, I left that, in the fridge, uneaten ...:)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Ahhh...I see whatcha did there...hehe. Nice ...very nice and sweet. Good stuff as usual. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Ahh, now Frieda figured it, more will get it -- it is much more subtle than I thought it.:)

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Yeah it took friends call out to make me reread ... Ha

[Frieda P]

Ha....not another one! Good slap upside the head my dear....

[Lyn Anderson]

Ahh, and you are the first to catch the sly pass -- cheeky girl!

[Frieda P]

We're on the same wave length apparently!

[Lyn Anderson]

Funny, even David Scott missed it -- he took it as straight up greeting card, lol.

[Frieda P]

It's all that nasty optimism, turns the world upside down haha

[Matching Socks]

KL, I love this!!
Absolutely love it. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

That's sweet. Thanks. Nice to be nice once in a while.

[Matching Socks]

Yeah... :)
it's nice to be a lot of things once in a while...
My birthday is tomorrow so I especially liked this.
:-)