the race

time perception

so quickly I rushed
into another man's
arms

so abruptly that
it sets off all your
alarms

so silently I succumbed
to a stranger's
charms

time elapses
memory;
how speedy
was the race?

Give or take
a day or two
    
it was
eighteen years
till someone
took your
place.

Reviews

[Papaya]

I understand the running but it seems time stands still until the facing.

[Lyn Anderson]

yes, sometimes, one's perception of the passage of time is distorted by one's distorted view of the relationship. Thank you for popping by this one.

[NeiL ArandA]

There was a movie titled " Fools Rush In " but I guess if you are in love or infatuated. There's nothing that can stop you for getting the biggest and coolest fish that swim in the ocean ..
But usually men should be getting territorial when they see another bee wandering close to their garden

[Lyn Anderson]

yes well the garden, as you so eloquently put it, is no longer his to hoe.:)

[NeiL ArandA]

LOL ...no longer his to hoe ... I like that choice of words. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you. I thought about it.:)

[Madalyn Beck]

We should race to each other from now on. Ha! Time is such a strange concept, seemingly simple, but seemingly never steady. xo (:

[Lyn Anderson]

Ha. Yes indeed my friend. I have often thought, if only I could have as good a lover as a girlfriend ...

[Madalyn Beck]

Cheers to the girls, for sure!

[Aethereal]

Jumping from one flame to another is truly aided by forgetfulness: I was inspired to write my own version of your wonderful poem which you may keep as a gift. It sings like song:

Eclipsed Memory

Suddenly he fled,
to another’s arms,
turned her mood to red,
set off her alarms.

It took time to shed
his emotive harms
from her heart and head,
all those magic charms.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is awesome. As soon as I get off my procrastinating butt, I will stop by and give your writes some proper attention.:)

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! Take your time. No need to rush. My poems aren't going anywhere. Get some rest if you need it.

[Sami Khalil]

The race give and take at the right time and place then back into space...Excellent...:)...............

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your reading and reviewing.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)........................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

at one time, for me it was twenty years...as the carpenters sang "it's going to take some time this time"---

time elapses at different speeds on different individuals' eyes.

[Lyn Anderson]

It certainly does. Thanks.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Time seems to fly by in good time but creep along in times of loneliness. I can certainly relate to this piece quite well.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. Unfortunately many can.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Tis my pleasure.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I understand this well Kit Kat but they can't judge us because they did this.So by all means into the other man's arms with you, while they contemplate just how they ended up sad and alone yes?

[Lyn Anderson]

How's the weather there? Think I am due for a beer on the beach.@@

[Vidya Bacchus]

Damn it is raining again .So a cat and an angel walk into a bar ........lol that can't end well yes?

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh that's so a poem. Stay tuned.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ha oh yeah I will :)