deer fencing

to some, this will make sense.

Nibbling
the deer
came up
once more
to weed
the garden
she planted --
way past
YEARLING
she has
torn out
her welcome.
a deer fence
around my heart
a shot gun
surrounds my mind
calligraphied
character pineapples
won't work
this time ...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Read then re.read and wonder if this is very much a woman's tale, sad perhaps and irreversible.

Come what may, your words run smoothly, emotionally but enigmatic Smiling now, wondering if there's far more than my initial, almost instant thoughts. You write so smoothly, trapping seconds as if you don't want to waste them with trivia!

[Lyn Anderson]

There is much to this tale, and your impressions are correct. A woman's tale. A lost relationship. The deer not shot, but on the other side of the fence.

[emmajoy]

More or less guessed as much... amazing what harm those strange wretched varmints can do. Hugs for that touch of sadness. But, has birthed a fine piece of writing, haunting in its way.

[Muse]

a shot gun
surrounds my mind

I like those two lines! I'm not sure what inspired you, but I'm feeling as if "one wrong move" and you may blow me away? May I suggest using an electric fence around the garden. And I promise to ask, before I take. ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Ha ha, there is a long story to this, for sure. I will fill you in.