Any body there ?

A short story I entered for a contest .

 

I had just entered my first apartment. The perfect one for me sea facing ,cozy Just right I should say.

I began settling things in the bedroom first. When I realized there was an unfurnished portion of the wall. Never noticed it before. The unpainted corner had something eerie about it. An instinct told me to place my ears on the wall. What I heard made me skip a heartbeat.” Tick Tock tick Tock “I could hear the watch right behind it. Was there somebody there?  A cadaver ! Oh NO!!

Author's Note

Entered this for a contest . Tell me how it is ? will write a continuation later .

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It is good in concept but bare in credibility as it jumps from the unknown to relaisation it was a watch ticking too quickly.

[Frieda P]

Maybe it's me, I'm not following, how did you get from 'tick, tock' a watch to a cadaver...maybe in the continuance it'll pull it all together.

[Ambereen]

A person who may have been buried alive ... May be May be not ... This is an impromptu write .... Thanks for dropping by any way

[Ambereen]

My Imagination is just soaring I guess

[Frieda P]

Okay I can see it going in that direction, maybe I need sleep lol

[Ambereen]

Coffee would be quicker :) The coffee addict that I think you are

[Frieda P]

It's 3:20 AM! ha, you're trying to kill me! ;-)

[Ambereen]

oops ! gud nite then and sweet dreams !

[Frieda P]

If I could sleep, I wouldn't be here.....

[Frieda P]

This is when I do most of my writing.

[Ambereen]

:)

[Helen Crutchett]

Oh goodness, a cadaver, perish the thought! A lively, mysterious piece of writing. Well done! Thank you for submitting this to my contest! ~ Helena

[Ambereen]

I am glad you liked it ... will write further in another version !

[Helen Crutchett]

I look forward to that!!